建筑类雅思作文高分范文及点评

　　建筑风格

　　Modern buildings are appearing in large numbers but some people believe that we should build our buildings in traditional styles. To what extent do you agree or disagree？

　　In recent years， an interesting trend has emerged. Countries with long histories and rich cultures have been modernizing the quickest， especially in terms of architecture. Many have criticized this as not respecting traditional culture. While traditional architecture should be protected， however， I feel it is not necessary to stop building modern structures as we move forward.

　　One reason for this is that modern buildings are more practical and comfortable to live and work in. While traditional buildings might look nice from the outside， they are often not very user-friendly. Modern buildings usually have lots of windows and light and are clean and energy efficient. Surely this will make those inside them happier.

　　Another point to consider is that modern buildings will give a good impression to those visiting from abroad. Consider Beijing during the Olympics， for example. Many foreigners were surprised to see all of the stunning new building designs. In the long run， this will probably attract more business and tourists to the country.

　　Of course， traditional architecture still has its value. Everyone loves visiting famous historical places and admiring architectural styles from throughout history. We should protect and appreciate such places for future generations， but at the same time， we don’t have to live in the past.

　　Ultimately， each city needs to find its own balance between “old” and “new” when it comes to building styles， but modern buildings are for sure a positive thing. After all， if we don’t continue to explore new building styles we won’t be able to let future generations know what our period of history was like.

　　（264 words）

　　Harvey点评：

　　写作线索：首段，现代建筑必要；第二段，因为现代建筑的实用性和舒适性；第三段，代表城市现代化；第四段；让步，传统建筑的价值。末段总结。

　　文中第三段的观点不够有力。其实现代建筑的优点直接分实用性和舒适性两个段落来重点阐述即可。比如实用性，现代化都市人口密度比以前大，摩天大楼skyscraper提高了城市土地的使用效率。

　　本文末句很有趣味，再仔细读读：After all， if we don’t continue to explore new building styles we won’t be able to let future generations know what our period of history was like.（毕竟，如果我们不继续开发新建筑的风格，我们的下一代将不会知道我们这一代的历史是什么样）历史是相对的，对于我们的子孙来说，我们现在的现代化建筑将成为他们眼里的古代建筑。

　　先学习下面的词汇和短语，然后再重读范文，体会它们在文中的运用

　　词汇

　　emerge vi.显现出来

　　architecture n.建筑物

　　practical adj.实用的

　　user-friendly adj.用户友好的，方便用户使用的

　　stunning adj.足以使人晕倒的，极好的

　　admire v.赞美，钦佩，羡慕

　　ultimately adv.最后，

　　短语

　　in terms of在。..方面

　　move forward前进

　　in the long run从长远看

　　for sure确实

　　after all 毕竟

　　let sb. do sth. 让某人做某事

　　三分钟熟读或背诵本文最实用的三个句子

　　In recent years， an interesting trend has emerged.

　　One reason for this is that modern buildings are more practical and comfortable to live and work in.

　　After all， if we don’t continue to explore new building styles we won’t be able to let future generations know what our period of history was like.

　　——摘自刘洪波2010新作《最简化雅思写作》

 

第二篇：教育类雅思作文高分范文及点评

Most countries spend lots of money on education as they start to recognize its importance. In your opinion which two following subjects are the most important for your people and which one is the least important?

Subject:

Literature  Sports

Mathematics  Economy

Physics History

Music Geography

It has been said that investing in education is investing in one’s future: this is true for both individuals and nations.  It is always somewhat subjective to say which is more important, the humanities or sciences, as both have value.  However, I would like to make a case for the importance of math and economics in this day and age.

Let us begin with math.  Mathematics is a foundation subject which bridges many different fields, from physics and chemistry to the Internet and modern medicine.  All of our material advances in the 20^th century could not have happened without advanced mathematics.  To be sure, it will also play a critical role in meeting challenges like global warming and space travel, to name just a few, in the future.

Likewise, economics is a fundamental discipline that allows societies to be stable and move forward.  History is full of example of kingdoms and empires that collapsed as their economies declined.  Most obviously, we need look no further than the current economic meltdown to see the importance of economics.  The jobs and wellbeing of individuals and nations alike depend upon a deeper understanding of this field.

While all subjects have their merit, perhaps Geography doesn’t have the same importance it once did.  After all, in our modern world we have 3-D maps online that allow us to see anywhere with the click of a mouse.  But to reiterate, we need a balanced approach to education where we still produce artists and thinkers and historians and so on.

To summarize, math and economics are critical subjects in the 21^st century.  Governments must do their part to make sure we invest in these key areas and have qualified teachers.  By doing so, they will ensure our prosperity and progress.

(294 words)

Harvey点评：

写作观点：数学、经济学重要，地理不重要。所以文章中间三段分别讨论三个学科。

这篇文章题型少见，题目内容对中国考生来说比较另类。说明哪个学科的重要性不难，难的是说明一个学科为什么不重要，还注意到题目中有最高级词汇：the most important, the least important。

我们受到的教育是行业没有三六九等，行行出状元。如果在小学课堂上讨论此类题目，有小朋友胆敢说地理最不重要，老师一定会发飙：“胡说，不要有偏见，各个学科都重要，人类都需要，缺一不可。”于是大家考试不能偏科，长大之后都没有了“偏见”。

而这篇文章就是逼着你写出偏见，让你偏科，还很极端，因为题目中有最高级。

所以我最欣赏的是在本文首段第二句话，在表达个人偏见前的让步：It is always somewhat subjective（主观的） to say which is more important, the humanities（人文学科） or sciences, as both have value. 这句话我相信也是大多数考生看完题目后的第一感觉，但表达不出来。

先学习下面的词汇和短语，然后再重读范文，体会它们在文中的运用

词汇

subjective      adj.主观的

foundation    n.基础

bridge    vt.架桥，连接

critical     adj.关键的，重要的

meltdown     n.彻底垮台

wellbeing     adj. 福利，康乐，安宁

reiterate    vt.反复地说，重申

短语

invest in投资于

make a case for 提出充分的理由 

in this day and age 当今

play a critical role in 起到关键作用

meet challenge 应对挑战

to name just a few 等等 = and so on

depend upon依赖，依靠

allow sb. to do sth. 使某人能做某事

with the click of a mouse 只需鼠标一点

do one’s part to尽自己的职责

key areas 重要领域

三分钟熟读或背诵本文最实用的三个句子

l   It is always somewhat subjective to say which is more important, the humanities or sciences, as both have value.

l   Mathematics is a foundation subject which bridges many different fields, from physics and chemistry to the Internet and modern medicine.

l   All of our material advances in the 20^th century could not have happened without advanced mathematics.