20xx年2月21日

Some people think that environmental problems are too big for individuals to deal with. Others, however, think that each individual should take some actions. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

考题分析：本题是一道典型的雅思环境类写作考题。在历届雅思写作环境类话题中，出题思路主要有以下三个方面：

1.环境保护是谁的责任？考题给出的选项通常会有个人、公司、国家、国际合作等（例如04年5月15日，0-7年2月3日考题）。

2.如何保护环境？考题通常会给出某个方案问其正确与否（如06年6月17日，08年6月14日考题）。

3.为什么人们明知环境正在被破坏却无动于衷例？（如08年9月13日A类议论文） 如果考前对以上三方面的雅思写作真题都思考过，相信本题一定会变的很简单，实际上只要把一些理由进行组合就可以了。由于考题的提问形式是“Discuss both views and give your own opinion. ”所以，既要讨论到个人能够采取何种行动解决一些环境问题，也要讨论为什么有些环境问题个人无法解决（即只有政府或公司才能解决）。Sample Answer:

It is true that our tiny individual actions often seem insignificant compared to the scale and complexity of global environmental problems such as pollution, deforestation and depletion of natural resources. But that does not relieve our duty as individuals to do as much as we can to deal with these problems.

Individual actions, small as they may be, can prove more effective than we realize. We can avoid driving the car, and take public transit, walk, or bicycle instead. This will reduce the use of fossil fuels and cut pollution. Saving energy at home, like turning on the air conditioner only when we have to, or turning water heater down a few degrees, is also ultimately good for the

environment. Individual actions can also turn into united powers when, for example, the whole neighborhood is mobilized to participate in a local campaign to oppose environmentally damaging policies.

There are, however, obstacles that stand in the way of individual action towards

environmental conservation. The first obstacle is the lack of professional knowledge needed to cope with serious environmental issues like soil erosion and salinity, which require a significant amount of investigation and research. Another obstacle which makes individual action almost impossible is when an environmental emergency or accident happens, e.g. an oil spill near the bord der line, which would necessitate government intervention or even international coordination. So, in conclusion, when it comes to environmental problems, individual actions are

indispensable in the problem solving process. But the most pressing and complicated problems go far beyond an individual’s capability and so require the concerted effort of the government as well as the global community.

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20xx年2月28日

Some people believe that improve public health should increase the number of sports facilities; others believe that it has little effects and need other measures to improve it.

Discuss both views and give your opinion.

考题分析：

本题是政府政策类话题和健康类话题的结合。考题虽新，但政府类话题和健康类话题话题却是经常出现的。考到政府政策类的话题，有一个思路总是可以通用的，那就是：政府可以通过教育来提升人们对于......的认识（这比花大笔资金建设某某工程要来的更“实惠”和有效。)下面的范文是朗阁海外考试研究中心研究员撰写的高分范文，其中就有对该思路的体现，值得借鉴。

Sample Answer （359 words）

The construction of new sports facilities are definitely needed in an environment where people's health is in a declining state. However, there are those who believe that the way to

improving people's health should lie in other measures that governments have to come up with to get people to live more healthily.

In many countries around the world, sports facilities are diminishing at an alarming rate, with existing ones being threatened with closure or face redevelopment in favor of housing and commercial development. The lack of sports facilities has directly led to a sharp decline in the general public’s involvement in sports activities, which is the major culprit for ill health and excessive weight nowadays. If a wider range of sports and fitness facilities (swimming pools,

basketball court and gymnasiums etc.) were available, then people would be more willing to spend time in these facilities to train their bodies and to improve their fitness, instead of living a sedentary life at home watching television, playing video games or using computers.

However, the building of such facilities may become a waste of time and taxpayers’ money if they are built far away from where people live or if they are too expensive to use. There are scenes of empty sports grounds in many cities because it takes too much trouble to get there, and many sports clubs are receiving fewer guests because they charge unreasonably high membership fees. In these cases, the government should be spending more on advertising healthier life style instead of just wasting money on facilities that are not going to be actively used by the people. For example, it is important for people to know that little things like jogging or taking the stairs provide as many benefits as using exercising equipment in a sports club.

All in all, the government should be spending more money on the campaigns of getting the people to be more involved in a healthier lifestyle instead of wasting taxpayers’ money on sports facilities that are barely used by the general public. This is by far the best way of improving the health standards of a nation as a whole.

20xx年3月7日

Newspapers have become an enormous influence on people’s ideas and opinions. Why is this the case? Is it a desirable or undesirable situation?

The nickname of the “Uncrowned King” given to the modern journalist is by no means an

exaggeration. In almost every modern society, newspapers have been playing an essential role in shaping people’s thoughts on a wide range of issues and are always regarded as an indispensable source of information. In my opinion, this complex phenomenon can be boiled down to several key factors, and both its positive and negative aspects need to be analyzed thoroughly.

To begin with, human curiosity is an underlying factor in the growing popularity of newspapers. As the only species on the planet equipped with extraordinary intelligence, humans are

inveterately curious about the latest events around the globe. Therefore, all kinds of newspapers prosper in such an age that is gushing with information, appealing to people’s increasingly strong desire to know more about this constantly changing world. It is little wonder that numerous readers are lured into heavier reliance on those well-established and internationally renowned newspapers.

To a large extent, this situation is a desirable one with its many positive aspects. First of all, in order to maintain their good reputation, most newspapers and magazines report actual events in a detailed way, providing not only factual information but also deep insights into complex social and political issues. In addition, circulated on a daily basis and across an extensive demographic region, major newspapers have smoothly operated branches, seasoned correspondents and a highly efficient system to collect local news with the swiftest actions. Most importantly, their coverage and insightful comments can encourage young readers to form their own opinions on current affairs.

On the other hand, people should be fully aware of the downside of the journalistic dominance. More often than not, newspapers of national importance are largely controlled by the government and act as the organ of the authorities. By furnishing citizens with prejudiced and self-opinionated reports on sensitive issues, such as foreign affairs and national security, these newspapers can manipulate their perspectives and attitudes and exercise a sort of monopoly on their way of

thinking. On a less serious level, flooding the pages with trivial pieces of entertainment news and celebrity secrets is the usual way to divert the public’s attention away from government scandals and to eclipse such social and economic ills as unemployment, crime and judicial incompetence. In conclusion, although the positive functions of modern journalism are to be sufficiently recognized, people must not slacken their vigilance against the possible abuse of such a

tremendous power that newspapers possess. In other words, while absorbing bits of information in the newspapers, readers are advised to adopt an objective approach and cast a discriminating eye on their way of presentation, comments and implicit assumptions.

20xx年1月30日

Nowadays, the issue of anti-social behaviour and lack of respect for others is not

uncommon. This is especially true among young people. There are mainly two causes of this phenomenon--the negative influence of mass media and the decline of the family and poverty.

As the mass media become increasingly commercialized, program producers and

publishers of books are more focused on ratings, which is clearly associated with profits. Therefore, violence of all kinds is presented on TV and in books. The constant exposure to violence is to suggest people that violence is an ordinary way of life, and that shooting and cheating are possible ways to succeed. We also notice that our societies and even our families have become less cohesive, as people have to struggle to cope with the challenges of life. The decline in our sense of community and family has gone

hand-in-hand with the rise of individualism. People increasingly look after their own interests without considering the needs of society.

Accordingly, it is the government's responsibility to introduce restrictions and supervision on the mass media, i.e. not allowing certain TV programs at given times, or by limiting the number of books published according to their content. Families and schools also play equally important role in dealing with this problem. Parental guidance is a key factor of self-cultivation in one's lifetime. Parents can spend more time staying with their children and patiently carry out the duty of family education. For children who exhibit some

anti-social behaviour, schools should help them to realize what they did is wrong rather than giving up on them.

Overall, although the problem of anti-social behaviour and lack of respect for others seem to be inevitable, we must recognize its negative effects on the society as a whole and work on effective measures to diminish its adverse influences.

专家点评：

本议论文的问题对于多数雅思考生来说稍显困难。困难之一来自于考生对 ―anti-society behavior‖的不了解。要写这篇文章，考生可以从现在的teenage身上看看实际的―反社会‖行为的例子。比方说―非主流‖的打扮、对于学习的厌恶、青少年犯罪、离婚家庭中子女的暴力表现和自暴自弃的表现、对男女关系处理方便的任性随便等等。例子数不胜数。如果不理解什么是―反社会‖行为，则这篇文章很难入手。专家建议在安排段落的时候可以用其中的一段用来列举部分“反社会”行为。第二点困难则来自于考生对这些―反社会‖行为的成因和解决方式找不到合适的语汇来表达。

从考生提供的这篇范文的内容和质量上来看，本文的作者是一名语法和词汇功底较好的考生。该考生在词汇和句式的使用上均有可圈可点之处。然而在谈论这些行为的成因和解决方法上，文章显得过于笼统和泛泛而谈，因为缺乏适当的实例而使得本来较好的语法和词汇功底显得有些spoiled。尤其是在第二个段落，考生有将―反社会‖行为片面的理解为―暴力行为‖的嫌疑。另外，句子与句子的连接上，作者在主体段中做的还稍显不够。因此，本文的评分应在6.5分左右。

朗阁海外考试研究中心专家提醒各位考生，写议论文要多用―例证‖，以显示考生对于社会和世界的了解。泛泛而谈的文章很难拿到令人满意的高分。

20xx年1月14日

A country active in scientific research is often one that has a strong power for innovation and wealth creation. Nevertheless, the optimal structure for such kind of research is still source of debate. Should it be the sole responsibility of the government?

Some people argue that it’s better for the government to control scientific research. They believe that research into nuclear technology, national defense or military intelligence is in the national interest or involves high levels of secrecy and should be carried out only by the government. Also, in basic scientific research which is directed purely towards the advancement of knowledge, or where results cannot be guaranteed, there is little

incentive for the private sector to invest in these areas and therefore the governments take the leading role.

There are, however, reasons for private companies to participate in scientific research. Research is done more efficiently by private companies because they are profit driven; their products are also more closely associated with market needs. Research into simple articles such as cosmetics or cough medicine is not what the government is interested in, so it’s necessary for the private sector to invest in these areas because they are important for our daily lives.

From my point of view, both the governments and private companies should be actively involved in scientific research. We should encourage the cooperation between different research institutes including state-owned research centers, universities and corporate labs to accelerate the transfer of technology and research into products and services that can benefit human life.

朗阁专家点评：

20xx年1月14日的考试为一次加试。A类议论文的题目完全重复了20xx年12月10日的A类议论文的考题。

从这个问题本身来说，考生可能会比较陌生也比较难以论述。“科学研究到底应该由政府来负责还是由公司来施行？”

朗阁海外考试研究中心专家提示，遇到抽象的题目，我们就要用具体的方法来对应。比如说像这道题目，我们的切入点可以是政府为什么样类型的科学研究负责；而私人公司又为怎样的科学研究负责，然后讲述各自的原因。

如本文作者所写的那样，牵涉到大笔资金投入和国家机密的research into nuclear

technology, national defense or military intelligence需要由政府来主导；而跟我们日常生活息息相关的research into simple articles such as cosmetics or cough medicine则应该由公司来负责。这样一来，文章不仅好写，而且生动。

本文论述结构严谨，条理清晰，词汇丰富，句式多变，不失为一篇优秀范文。

20xx年1月9日

Common individuals tend to be more prepared to offer help to their relatives than to the workmates and regular friends. And it may be the human nature to show greater preference to the people related. While the issue being magnified to the national level, similar controversy arises concerning whether the national charity organizations of one country should only goes to the domestic emergency or all the people in need should be supported whatever their nationality are. As for me, I assert that loving care and assistance should never be confined within the national boundary.

Undeniably, the domestic citizens are supposed to acquire the native aid, physically and economically. The fund and the material resource of the charity institution mainly come from the generous donation of the public and of course the masses should enjoy the access in case of emergency, in other words, from the people, to the people.

On the other hand, the people suffering the miserable lives, such as the natural

disaster and the extreme poverty, should be involved into the help list of all such aid agencies. This is particularly necessary in the case of the catastrophic disasters when sudden earthquake or the seaquake occurs. People involved generally lose all their belongings in such tragedy and are severely shocked, physically because of the loss of all possession and mentally due to the loss of the relatives, hence a hopeless situation. Considering their difficult position, every piece of bread provided for these people may be crucial to their survival, and every penny supplied to them might be significant to their livelihood. Still remember the disastrous earthquake of 8.0 scales taking place in China, it is the unselfish supply all around the world that help the affected regions to survive in the tragedy.

When considering the necessity of the aid, the cases with the greatest urgency and the mal-conditions should always be given priority, rather than the nationalities of the victims.

朗阁专家点评：

本次考题为国际援助类考题，在去年的9月份曾经考过一样的题目。

本文使用的是让步段的写法，这是一种既能展开双边论述，扩展写作空间，又能清晰体现作者观点倾向的写法，推荐！

主体段第一段为让步段，论述的是求助资金需要―取之于民，用之于民‖；主体段第二段论述的则是为何国际援助是必须的。整个论述比较严谨，用词和语法方面也体现了作者比较成熟的论证思路和优秀的语言表达水平。

朗阁专家建议：

虽然这篇文章总体来说是一篇比较优秀的范文，但是读起来仍因缺乏实例而感到有点阅读压力。作者在主体段第二段提到了在中国―5·12‖地震中接受到的援助。如果能够生动的对这些援助的类型进行举例，再说明这些国际援助的必要性和体现的―地球村‖的含义，文章会生动很多。

值得一提的文章的引言段，作者分析了为何人们会提出援助应该只提供给本国这样的问题，这样的写法脱离了所谓的写作模板，也显示了文章作者思考的深度

20xx年3月6日

Population ageing has emerged as a global phenomenon in the wake of the now virtually universal decline in fertility and increases in life expectancy. Many countries are

confronted with new demographic realities that spread from the cities to the villages. In my opinion, more problems than benefits will surface with this trend.

Admittedly, older people often have time to offer for the benefit of family and the community. Nowadays, the young tend to rely on the older generation for household chores. It is also reported that time devoted to voluntary work and care is at its height within the age groups over 55. Such devotion adds greatly to the community well-being, if not to the GDP.

Population ageing, however, brings about serious economic and social problems. When the number of workers decreases, the national income goes down. At the same time, as a

person's use of health services increases significantly in the later years of their life, an ageing population causes a relative rise in the public resources required for pensions, health and residential care outlays. Moreover, with an ageing population, the problems associated with the ―sandwich generation‖, people who have both children and parents to look after, have gained increasing prominence. Members of this ―in-between‖ generation are often torn between the needs of raising children, caring for ageing parents and job responsibilities.

To sum up, population ageing is an inevitable prospect, the negative effects of which outweigh the positive. As ageing is a normal part of lifecycle for human beings, we must recognize its challenges to our life and society, and work on effective strategies to minimize its adverse influences.

朗阁海外考试研究中心专家点评：

本次考题和20xx年3月的一个考老龄化的题目（In many countries, the

proportion of older people is steadily increasing. Does this trend have more positive or negative effects on the society?）类似，本次的考题为讨论寿命增长对个人和社会的影响。这道考题因为和社会现实比较贴近，又是生活类文章，因此难度较小。在写作的时候，考生需要注意以下三个问题：

1. 虽然出题的形式为报告的形式，但事实上写作可以从人的寿命增长的优缺点，

也就是正面影响和负面影响来进行讨论。

2. 讨论的时候要注意，文章已经给出了两个论证角度，一个是对个人的，一个是

对社会的，这两点都要写到。

3. 在写作的时候多用实例，例子可以参考范文。

本次所选的范文为上海交通大学出版社出版的《最新雅思高分范文·第四版》中收录的20xx年3月议论老龄化优缺点的文章，虽然和本次考试的论证角度稍有不同，但是对于考生来说，本文将会非常有借鉴意义。

20xx年2月27日

Over the last century, modern technology has exerted tremendous influence on

individuals and the society as a whole. It has revolutionized people’s original lifestyles and improved the quality of their lives to a very large extent. However, many of its negative side effects should no longer be neglected.

There is no denying that technological development such as the application of vehicles of all kinds contributes to mobility and convenience in people's lives. Flights and trains allow us to discover new cultures of distant continents swiftly. Cars and buses take us to our destination without any efforts on our own. Yet, this mobility and convenience is achieved at the environmental expense. Such vehicles release CO2 into the air, which is a major reason responsible for the ever devastating global warming.

Other technologies in the form of computers and the internet are penetrating into our lives on a daily basis. In spite of their great help in the workplace, education, entertainment and communication, problems of deteriorated eyesight, misleading information, the surge of pornography and disconnection with real people have emerged, to name but a few. The most worrying concern lying with these problems is their damage to young people in terms of their physical and psychological growth. Much evidence has suggested that quite a number of teenagers in Shanghai are addicted to the Internet and that their devotion to the cyber world has created serious negative effects in their school and home lives. Facts show that Internet addiction has become the biggest cause of juvenile delinquency, as youngsters tend to imitate crimes they have read about on seedy Websites or steal money to pay for the bill from internet bars .

Overall, as no one can plead ignorance of modern technology and its effect, it is important that we balance its benefits with an understanding of the price we have paid. Not until we realize both its pros and cons can we make the most of it.

朗阁海外考试研究中心专家点评：

本次大作文题目出的比较简单。之所以说这个题目简单，主要体现在两个方面：一是话题。本次考试为科技类话题，基本上都会被作为主流考题在课上被培训老师提及。二是发挥空间。可以看到这道题目要求讨论的就是科技本身。考生在发挥的时候可以通过具体的科技领域，比如本文作者所采用的交通科技和电脑网络信息科技。

当遇到了题目范围比较大的文章，考生应当首先想到对文章的讨论范围进行具体化，而不是就一个空泛的概念泛泛而谈。

虽然这道题目没有要求考生一定要从科技的优缺点两方面来讨论，但是可以看到考生仍然考虑到了辩证的全面性，在主体段的两端中分别以优点开头，转而进行缺点的讨论。这样的论证方法称为“驳论”，既能展现作者的鲜明观点，也能展示作者思维的全面性。本文在语言方面的把握也比较贴切娴熟，得分在7分左右。

20xx年2月11日

Some people think that politicians have the greatest influence on the world. Other people, however, believe that scientists have the greatest influence.

Discuss both of views and give your opinion.

The impetus behind the development of society is generated by people from all walks of life, especially politicians and scientists. People pass different judgments on them and it seems hard to define whose accomplishment is superior to the other.

There is no denying that politicians exert tremendous influence on the society, regardless of eras. They are entitled to represent the country and its citizens, with the authority conferred by law. As policy makers, their decisions and instructions may manipulate the situation of the country and even the whole world. For instance, the reform and

opening-up policy, proposed by the great politician — Deng Xiaoping, brings China a brand-new look; its far-reaching impact has lasted so far and will remain effective.

However, it is a remarkable fact that wrong decisions sometimes leads to disasters; the war is a good case in point.

Scientists are also regarded as an indispensable part in human history. Technological advancements made by them have revolutionized people’s original lifestyles and

improved the quality of their lives. Yuan Longping, the ―Father of hybrid rice‖, dramatically boosts the production and his achievement is utilized throughout the world. Another

devotion of scientists that cannot be neglected is that they shoulder the responsibility for popularity of science and technology, which helps wipe off ignorance and superstitions; geocentric theory of the universe brings a new face on people’s scientific knowledge. Unfortunately, their intentions may result in some negative consequence, out of their

expectations. Whether GMF(Genetically modified food) is a blessing or curse is still under discussion.

In conclusion, we should admit that both politicians and scientists are driving force behind the social developments; they make contributions in various forms in different fields. It is their combined effort that promotes the progress of human society. On the other hand, the problems arising should not be underestimated.

朗阁海外中心专家点评：

本次考试题目要求考生比较政治家和科学家对社会的影响。应该说，可以扩展的内容还是很大的。因为题目中的关键词politician, scientist和influence的范围都很广，因此考生在完成这篇文章的时候可以从政治家和科学家对于社会，家庭和个人的影响上进行阐述。需要注意的是，考生要对这两者均进行比较，且要以实例来进行说服论证，没有具体的政治家和科学家的例子，文章将会相当枯燥且没有说服力。

范文在这一点上就做的很好，给出了非常切实的例子来进行说明。文章结构安排相当工整，也比较易读，如果能在结尾段给出自己的倾向，而不是以喊口号的方式结尾的话，文章将会更好。

20xx年2月20日

It is definitely true that economic development would lead to some by-products including the loss of social values but these problems cannot cover the outstanding achievements. I think advantages of economic development and disadvantages of that will coexist for a long time.

Economic progress is the basis of all the nations in the world. United States is the most advanced country and the living standard of the people in that country is very high. The citizens could have high level of social welfare and they enjoy free medical care and free education. Even the poorest people in the States could get the social insurance, which ensures their impossibility to get starved. Take China as another example. During the years of social reform, the manufacturing industry has been improved a lot and the

international trade in China was vigorous. Most multinational companies are investing in the country so that the citizens in China would have more opportunities to get a good job and their living standards would be higher.

But one thing we could not ignore is that the social values are losing day by day.

Especially in some developing countries, as they are developing economy, some severe situations would occur. For example, in some Asian countries, more and more illegal

prostitutes appear, which would cater to the needs of some businessmen, who would use sex as a means of negotiation. In some developed countries, the same thing happened again. Tiger Woods is a typical example. He is a wealthy guy, but he is not loyal to his wife and he had the affairs with the lots of women. The other examples could be found in NBA even in the political world. Bill Clinton, the former president of the United State, came across the similar problem. So we could get the idea that economic accumulation would cause to people to seek other undesirable excuse to obtain satisfaction. Step by step, the values could collapse. Other social values have been lost as well. For instance, in the

business world, the colleagues are not cooperative as before; instead the competition makes them to be enemies. As a result, the relationship of the people in the society is much worse than that in the past. Money-oriented society is a formidable thing. And the consequence of that is more than the loss of social values.

The trend of economic development cannot be reversed and most people welcome it much. And disadvantages of economic development, I would say they are almost equal and it is a sociological question and more work should be done to access the answer.

朗阁海外考试研究中心专家点评：

本文特邀了朗阁海外考试研究中心高级研究员贾若寒老师在20分钟内完成撰写。虽然免不了有文字上的错误，但是从观点的论证上来看由于引用了非常多的实例而使得经济建设的优缺点都被阐述的相当清楚且掷地有声。而在语言的运用上也基本符合英语文章的行文要求，用词准确恰当的表述了作者的观点。是一篇相当有借鉴意义和模仿功能的范文。

20xx年2月6日 雅思A类议论文及点评

Improved traffic technology(transportation technology) has made travelling means more various than ever before. People relish their journey by diverse transportation. Some people consider that air travel actually widen(widens) the gap between the rich and poor due to the only benefits it offers to the wealthy group, while the majority of average people are kept far away from the advantages of the development of air travel. Personally, I do not think this is the complete picture.

Admittedly, the cost of flight is much higher than the travelling expense by railway or some other means of transport. The price would be more likely twice or even triple that of trains or buses. Rich people may tend to enjoy its swiftness and comfortableness, while humble citizens prefer to take more care of their purse, giving ways to the endurance of filthy compartments and noisy surroundings in trains and buses.

Nevertheless, the less-wealthy folk(people) are not completely out of the gate. Due to the stagnant market and the fierce competition in the domain of civil aviation companies, plenty of preferential and promotion activities(programs) are offered to consumers which makes(make) air flight possible(affordable) for average people due to the diving price. (For example,) CAAC ever sliced 80% off from the original price to attract more

passengers. What's more, some business people have to make the option of flying due to some urgent jobs no matter they are rich or not(no matter what kind of social economic status they are in).

From what discussed above(From what has been discussed above), it seems

unreasonable to maintain that air travel offers convenience only to the wealthy people. It is bound to benefit more people, given the more prosperous marketing and more advanced air traffic system.

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专家点评：

本次考试的题目为论述“飞行”这种交通方式是否只对富人有利，而对于大多数人来说并不能享受到这种交通方式的便利。

这道题的话题还是比较容易论述的：因为随着全球化的扩深化，“飞行”已经成为常用的旅行方式之一，成为了人们日常生活的一部分。比如说，在国内正逢春运高峰，而近几年的春运，并非只有铁路和公路运输承担着重大的压力，航空公司也是一票难求。随着人民生活水平的提高和航空运输业的发展，飞机票的价格也不像从前那样的遥不可及。无论是公事还是私事，这种交通方式已经被普遍应用和接受。更何况，即使是普通人也有出国旅行的实

力，那也是必然要选择飞行的。再者来说，目前通往机场的交通方式也得到了大幅的改观。拿上海来说，只要话上不到20元的价格，就能从市中心乘坐机场大巴到机场。即使是乘坐先进的磁悬浮列车，花费也不过在50元而已。这跟以往机场独立于城市之外，没有便捷的交通抵达的情况是不能相提并论的。

本次考生提供的范文在语言的表达上也是总体来说符合英文行文要求的，除了有些地方的语言存在比较明显的问题（请见红色标注修改部分）。在句式的灵活运用和词汇的选择使用上不乏可圈可点之处。文章的论述也采取了带有倾向性的双边论述方法，将作者的观点表述清楚。文章若能在主体段的第二段将论述的内容（如本文第二段所示）再进行一点扩展，将能起到更令人信服的论述效果。本文的得分在6.5分左右。

20xx年1月23日 雅思A类议论文及点评

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From the first rise of the capitalism in the 19th century to the economic globalization in the present days, the 200 years in between have witnessed a dramatic change in the gap between the rich and the poor, which brought forward the question of what the

consequences of such phenomenon are and what can be done to compensate for it. Here follows the analysis on its impact on the society as well as some possible solutions.

Undeniably, such tendency will certainly have a negative impact on the society. To be more precise, it may contribute to the instability of the nations. For one thing, the crime rate will rise as a result of this change. Taking those of limited means as an example, by having so many people in desperate financial conditions while allowing such a small group of people control most of the wealth of the state, it will arise hatred and prejudice among the former group and perfect motivations for them to commit a crime, thereby threatening the safety of the citizens as well as disturbing public security. For another, this enlarged gap may cause riots or even war as well. The Chinese Nationalist government, for instance, focused too much on taking care of the interest of the rich while ignoring the

suffering of the poor people which triggered the revolution. The fight can not be stopped even with the finest weapon and the smartest generals.

To tackle these problems, however, the government should act as a dominant feature. In other words, it is only the government that has the ability to establish a more enhanced welfare system. By levying a heavier tax on the rich and use the of money to aid those who are in desperate need of the financial assistance, it will, to some extent, obtain

appreciations from the poor and thus eliminate some of their thoughts to gain properties in illegal manners, hence creating a more harmonious relationship between the two parts. Another way of resolving the problem at hand is to promote charity donations. The

government, at the same time, is advised to utilize its propaganda machine in an attempt to highlight the need of the poor people to their counterpart as well as raise feelings of mercy so that they will be willing to give away their money which will be well used in

promoting their health care and education quality, thus bridging the gap between the rich and the poor.

From the argument above, it is reasonable to conclude that alleviating the current issue requires the great effort of the government together with the compromising of the rich to some extent and by taking the proper measures as listed above, the campaign of reducing the financial difference between the rich and the poor will finally reach some levels of success.

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朗阁海外考试研发中心专家点评：

从范文可以推断出该考生的语言功底比较扎实，无论是从论证过程、语汇使用还是考生写“长句”的能力来看都能证明这一点。

首先，考生基本上完成了题目中的两个问题，分析了贫富差距造成的两个问题，也提出了两种解决问题的方法。

贫富差距问题是现今社会的一个热议话题，由于贫富差距造成的犯罪率（尤其是和将他人财富占为己有这类犯罪行为）上升给社会带来的不稳定因素一直是政府和专家致力研究和解决的问题；另外，贫富差距也造成了作者在文中所提到的战乱的问题。但是笔者以为，对于这个问题的分析还可以更细一点，比如贫富差距对年轻人的影响。比如上海乃至中国近期热议的“富二代”的生活方式和道德观念。笔者建议对这类热议话题的观点发展，可以多多以实例来说明，更能显示考生对于世界的关心和深入的思考。

而对于解决这个问题的策略，该考生提到了政府在征税和推广慈善捐献两条举措，同样，也可以用实例来进行论证。同时，可以有更新鲜的观点来打动，比如：推动经济更快发展、大力发展私有经济、提高政府卫生和教育开支、抑制贪污腐败等。从导致贫富差距的原因发展出相应的解决方法来进行写作。

值得一提的是，该考生的作文字数达到了469个词，如非基础扎实，在考试的40分钟内要写出这么长的文章还是比较困难的。就目前的评分趋势来看，300-350个词的文章比较受欢迎，也比较能说明问题。该作者字数过多的原因很大一部分就在于，长句过多！

然而，雅思议论文评分标准有明确规定说短句和长句要相结合，进行灵活使用。如果考生为了显示自己的语言水平，不断的写出长句，不仅容易犯错，更给读者带来阅读压力，并不是非常可取。

总体来说，该考生的这篇范文在论证和语言上有值得借鉴的部分，也有值得推敲的部分。考官评分为6.5分左右。