l   题目：

The traffic has become one of the major problems in the cities. Some people think that this problem can be solved by telecommuting from home. What is your opinion? Can you suggest others solutions?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. （每篇作文都有这个指令，请注意。）Write at least 250 words.

范文：

It is certainly true that today traffic in cities throughout the world has become a major problem. This is obvious from the number of vehicles on our roads and the amount of pollution they cause. Probably the traffic problem is due to individuals travelling for work, study or shopping purposes and this is evident in the rush hours we experienceevery morning and evening.

It is also true that, these days, such daily commuting is not always necessary because people can do these things from home. We can see this in the options Information Technology gives us today. For instance, on-line work, distance learning and shopping facilities are all available via the Internet.

However, even if everyone had access to the technology and the opportunity to work from home, it is unrealistic to think that everyone would want to. Even though the technology for working, studying or shopping on-line makes this option a possibility, nevertheless it would mean people had less freedom of choice and less social contact in their lives. This would have a large impact on society as a whole.

So, in conclusion, I think that while this practice could reduce the traffic problems in our cities, it is most unlikely to be an acceptable solution. In terms of other solutions, perhaps we need to think more carefully about facilitating public transport and limiting private cars in our city centers.The development of public transport that is not road-based, such assky trains or subways would probably be a more acceptable alternative measure to reduce jams on our roads.

一、写作思路（1.对比；2. 辩证思维+角相关论证+重要的相关例证）

考生突破了国内学生所习惯的写作模板。仔细比较之后发现该考生破题关键处使用的句型基本都是剑桥雅思1和剑桥雅思2官方范文常用的句型（该考生20##年参加雅思考试，可供参考的范文只有剑桥雅思前三册范文）。

主体段落首先是回应了”telecommuting from home”这种缓解交通压力的观点，肯定了其合理之处（这是符合人类知识和事实的）。写作时很注意”程度控制”，使用了”such daily commuting is not always necessary”这种巧妙的处理方法。符合事实，同时为下文留下了论证空间。同时加以例证，满足雅思大作文要求的同时也增加了说服力，还增加了字数（LOL哈哈）。

第三段采用了议论文惯用的伎俩（体现了辩证思维）：指出其不合理之处。需要提醒大家的是：议论文的行文就像一场辩论赛，驳斥的是不合理之处并加以例证，目的就是说服别人。有很多人对人家观点的合理之处进行攻击，提出有违人类常识的论调，这着实没有必要。因为你很难说服读者。

最后一段既是结尾又顺便回答了考题的另外一个问题，做到全面回应考题，不遗漏要点（fully and appropriately answer all parts of the question）。

需要特别指出的是：这篇作文每一段只有三句话，分别体现了the ideas are relevant(中心句与主题相关), developed（拓展） and supported（如，例证）。最后一点体现作者的立场是clear and effective。

二、Coherence and Cohesion

全文的各处连接没有致命问题。思路清晰，观点明确。

1. 这篇作文体现了critical thinking(辩证思维)。Ideas 衔接过渡自然.

(The information and ideas, including paragraphing, are well organized and presented.)

2.The information is linked.

 

三、Lexical Resources（与交通直接相关词汇如下）

traffic in cities、the number of vehicles on our roads、the amount of pollution they cause、travelling for work, study or shopping purposes、the rush hours we experience、daily commuting、reduce the traffic problems、facilitating public transport and limiting private cars in our city centers、not road-based、sky trains or subways、reduce jams on our roads

词汇使用比较灵活，虽无大词难词，但是完成任务足够。关键是使用准确到位，没有明显的缺陷。

关于词汇替换：这个是学员很纠结的地方，总觉得自己的词汇量不大，大词难词掌握的少。其实大不必担心，也不必无谓地使用那些无关紧要的词。读者有阅读预期，议论文写作词汇的灵活性主要体现在与主题相关词汇的使用。一些功能词汇，有把握才使用替换词以避免重复。

 

四、Grammatical Range and Accuracy

句子结构的变化和语法的精确度是很多同学应该学习的地方。

每一段三句话，全文四段共12句话，短短的260词（含标点）却令人惊讶地展现了英语句型的各种变化。尤其是前四句，分别使用了：主从复合句（含名词性从句中的主语从句）、简单句、并列复合句（含形容词性从句即定语从句）、主从复合句（含名词性从句中的主语从句）+副词性从句！

短短四句话，尽情使用了英语中几乎全部的句子结构和主从复合句中全部的从句类型！

当然了，该文也有一些语法瑕疵，比如：

1/Probably the traffic problem is due to individuals travelling for work, study or shopping purposes 并列的三处应使用 V-ing 式

2/We can see this in the options Information Technology gives us today.没必要大写信息技术首字母

3/Even though the technology for working, studying or shopping on-line makes this option a possibility, nevertheless it would mean people had less freedom of choice and less social contact in their lives. This would have a large impact on society as a whole.

这句虚拟语气使用不当，应该改成：

Even though the technology for working, studying or shopping on-line made this option a possibility, nevertheless it would mean people would have less freedom of choice and less social contact in their lives. This would have a great impact on the society as a whole.

当然了，这些错误在考官看来可能并不影响交流质量，也没扣分。从中看出雅思考官看重的是交流质量。

整体看，本文12句话的句子结构均比较复杂，句子也较长，远远超出了大陆考生的语法应用水平。建议大家在语法上多下功夫，切实地提高语言基本功。切莫浮躁。

l  满分9分作文：

Globalization is a declaration of war upon all other cultures. And in culture wars, there is no exemption of civilians, there are no innocent bystanders. Why should it be expected that ancient and rooted civilizations are going to accept this peripheralisation without a struggle? The answer to that is that globalization carries an implicit promise that it will relieve poverty and offer security—perhaps the most ancient of human dreams. Because of the power of global capitalism to create wealth, it is assumed that this priority must sweep aside all other human preoccupations, including all existing institutions, interpretations and searches for meaning in the world.

It is disingenuous to assume that economy, society and culture operate in separate spheres. This suggests that, one, exposed to the globalizing imperative, no aspect of social life, customary practice, traditional behaviour will remain the same.

There have been, broadly, two principal responses in the world, which we may call the fatalistic and the resistant. It is significant that among the most fatalistic have been the leaders of G-7, Ex-President Clinton said globalization is a fact not a policy choice Tony Blair said it is inevitable and irreversible. It may be considered paradoxical that the leaders of the most dynamic and expanding economies in the world offer such a passive, unchallenging view of what are, after all, human-made arrangements. These are among the richest and most proactive regimes, which can wage endless war on the great abstraction, that is terror, topple regimes and lay down one WTO law for the poor and another for themselves. Is their helplessness in the presence of these mighty economic and cultural powers?

　　There are two aspects to resistance. One is the reassertion of local identities—even if local actually means spread over very large parts of the world. The reclaiming of the local is often focused in the field of culture—music, songs and dance. This suggests an attempt to guarantee it from the effects of economic integration; a kind of cordon sanitaria set up around a dwindling culture. Some people believe it is possible to get the best of both world—they accept the economic advantages of globalization and seek to maintain something of great value—language, tradition and custom. This is the relatively response. The other has become only too familiar: the violent reaction, the hatred of both economic and cultural globalization which may not merely perceive, but feel in the very core of their cognition, as an inseparable violation of identity. The resentment of many Muslims toward the U.S and Israel, the defensive posturing of Vindu fundamentalism, opposed both to Islam and Christianity, are the most vivid dramatizations of this.   

l  题目：

　　You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic:

　　Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair.

　　Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

　　Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

　　Write at least 250 words.

　　考官范文：

　　As a result of constant media attention, sports professionals in my country have become stars and celebrities, and those at the top are paid huge salaries. Just like movie stars, they live extravagantlifestyles with huge houses and cars.

　　Many people find their rewards unfair, especially when comparing these super salaries with those of top surgeons or research scientists, or even leading politicians who have the responsibilityof governing the country. However, sports salaries are not determined by considering the contribution to society a person makes, or the level of responsibility he or she holds. Instead, they reflect the public popularity of sport in general and the level of public support that successful stars can generate. So the notion of ‘fairness’ is not the issue.

　　Those who feel that sports stars’ salaries are justified might argue that the number of professionals with real talent are very few, and the money is a recognition of the skills and dedication a person needs to be successful. Competition is constant and a player is tested every time they perform. in their relatively short career. The pressure from the media is intense and there is little privacy out of the spotlight. So all of thesefactors may justify the huge earnings.

　　Personally, I think that the amount of money such sports stars make is more justified than the huge earnings of movie stars, but at the same time, it indicatesthat our society places more value on sport than on more essential professions and achievements.

　　鄙人拙译：

　　在媒体不断地推波助澜下，我国的许多职业运动员已成为了明星和名人。那些顶尖的运动员收入颇丰。像一些电影明星一样，他（她）们也是香车豪宅，生活极为奢华。

　　许多人觉得与那些挣高薪的顶级外科医生，从事研究的科学家或有管理国家责任的高官相比，他（她）们的回报极为不公。然而，运动员的薪水并不是由一个人对社会所做出的贡献或者其责任水平所决定。相反，它们反映的是从整体上来说体育运动在大众中的普及性以及那些成功的体育明星对促进公众对运动的支持所做出的贡献。所以，“公平”的概念并不是问题关键之所在。

　　那些认为体育明星拿高薪无可厚非的人争辩说那些有天赋的体育运动员实属凤毛麟角，高薪是对他（她）们娴熟技能和通往成功之路所付出努力的承认。竞争持续不断，运动员在他（她）们相对较短的运动生涯中迎接每次检验。来自于媒体的压力令人窒息，而且他（她）们必须生活在镁光灯下，没有隐私。这一切都证明了他（她）们高薪得之无愧。

在我个人看来，比起电影明星的高薪，体育明星的高薪更受之无愧。但与此同时，该现象也显得出我们的社会更关注体育而非其它一些更重要的领域和成就。

l  题目：

　　It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.有人天生就有某种天份，比如体育和音乐的天份。但是有人说任何孩子都可能被教成运动员和音乐家。讨论两种观点?

　　★ 范文介绍：

　　This model has been prepared by an examiner as an example of a very good answer. However, please note that this is just one example out of many possible approaches.

　　★ 头脑风暴：

　　这篇文章其实考察的是勤奋和天份哪一个对于成功更加重要。人人都渴望成功，但是一些特殊的领域，像音乐，体育，文学和艺术创造等，杰出的人物多是需要天赋的，乔丹不一定是最勤奋的运动员，但是一定是最有篮球天赋的。莫扎特从三岁时就显出了非凡的音乐天才，他时常走到钢琴前面，按着琴键细听，并努力弹出他曾经听到过的音乐。但是世间毕竟还是凡人为多，我们也常说天道酬勤，勤能补拙，成功是99%的勤奋+1%的天份。所以支持勤奋明显是更站得住脚。

　　★ 经典语料库：(考官果然是用词精准，许多小词非常贴切和漂亮，下面所有的单词在我的8000词汇课程中都有讲解)

　　1.acquire 学习(尤其是指知识和技能的获得)

　　2.innate talents 与生俱来的才华

　　3.inherit 遗传而得

　　4.nature 天份

　　5.nurture 后天的教育

　　6.excel 优秀，胜过他人

　　7.exceptional 优秀的

　　8.facility 便利，容易

　　9.via 通过

　　10. versus 于---相对

　　★谋篇布局：

　　Para. 1 背景介绍+争议焦点(作者首段没有提出观点，自然过渡到了论证的部分，也留下了想象空间，激发读者兴趣的——文无定法).

　　Para. 2 反方(支持勤奋)观点的合理性

　　Para. 3 正方(支持天份)观点的合理性

　　Para. 4 写作意图(客观辩证的让步正方法观点的合理性，综合正反方观点的合理性提出自己的个性观点)

　　Para 5 总结观点(明确提出支持反方观点，但是又让步了一下正方观点的合理性)

　　①The relative importance of natural talent and training is a frequent topic of discussion when people try to explain different levels of ability in, for example, (插入语)sport, art or music.

　　②Obviously, education systems are based on the belief that all children can effectively be taught to acquire different skills, including those associated with sport, art or music. So from our own school experience, we can find plenty of evidence to support the view that(用事实支持论点) a child can acquire these skills with continued teaching and guided practice.

　　③However, some people believe that innate talent is what differentiates a person who has been trained to play a sport or an instrument, from those who become good players. In other words, (再解释)there is more to the skill than a learned technique, and this extra talent cannot be taught, no matter how good the teacher or how frequently a child practices.

④ I personally think that(写作意图) some people do have talents that are probably inherited via their genes. Such talents can give individuals a facility for certain skills that allow them to excel, while more hard-working students never manage to reach a comparable level. But, as with all questions of nature versus nurture, they are not mutually exclusive. Good musicians or artists and exceptional sports stars have probably succeeded because of both good training and natural talent. Without the natural talent, continuous training would be neither attractive nor productive, and without the training, the child would not learn how to exploit and develop their talent.

　⑤In conclusion, I agree that any child can be taught particular skills, (明确支持反方观点)but to be really good in areas such as music, art or sport, then some natural talent is required.(让步正方观点的合理性)