首先自我介绍一下……我考过４次托福（纯粹爱好，第一次分就够了）作文都是满分，ＳＡＴ作文也是满分１２分

今天就献丑给大家点小技巧吧～

说在前面：因为我词汇、语法、句法实在是不行，所以走的写作路线是纯平民路线，没有任何SAT词汇，句法貌似只有定语从句，所以很简单……英语基础和我一样低等的人也很好上手……所以~嘿嘿~

我不是英语高手，我只是作文帝

首先要搞明白的是，考试中的Essay永远不是抒情文、记叙文或者文学作品，而是议论文，是表现一个学生逻辑思考、思想深度以及行文结构表达方式的载体，所以记住的是“重要的不是你的句法、词汇，而是你的思想、结构。”

几个注意点

1.不要用长句。

新东方作文最牛逼的北京的史愚老师亲口教导我的，长句有两个问题，一是中国学生水平不够，很难写出语法没有错误、意思表达准确的长句，语法错误、几个逗号连用、倒装从句混合是经常的。二是看essay的人也是人，经常是那种大学生研究生，没人愿意看长句混在一起的文章，短剧更讨人喜欢，并且表达意思更加清晰，准确。

2.细节要注意

出现My brother, friend的时候加上名字，出现university的时候要给上名字，给出事例的时候要给出时间地点人物，没人愿意看“我的弟弟去了一个大学，然后再大学里交了很多朋友，后来去了公司里那些朋友成为了他的财富”，而“我的弟弟Dan去了Upenn读书，在学校里认识了Jeff、Dennis等好朋友，而他后来去Google公司工作的时候发现了他们成为了自己一生宝贵的财富”比上面那句好了很多。实在要写流水账也要写出细节和感觉。

3.瞎编要编的像

不解释

4.自己的事例难写，最好不要写

5.积累，积累，再积累

没有积累和自己独立的想法，议论文写个吊？

下面就是926考的一题托福题，实在是想不出来考试时写的每句话，大概简短的还原一下当时写的东西，希望有所帮助

It is more important for government to pay attention to health care issues than environmental issues, do you agree or not?

（题目，环境保护和医疗改革哪个更重要）

"Water and air are the sources of people's lives, and the bases of the world." This was said by the ancient greek philosopher Thales.素，相似的话说过，稍加改动就可以出一个quote）（谢谢45楼的朋友纠正，是Thales说的，不是Hume）Looking at the dirty air in the sky, smelling the gross smell from Yantze River, I can't agree with him any more.The environmental issues are always the most important to a country, especially the country I live in, China.原因，毕竟不存在完全客观的文章，主观因素客观环境都要适当强调）

When the environment is becoming worse and worse, I have to say it is the most serious problem in this country. My junior high classmate , Anita, lived by the end of the Yangtze River. The industrial area is around there and all the factories pollute the water day by day. Unfortunately she got cancer, like many people who lived there. If the polluted environment wants to "kill" you, there is no doctor in this world can save us. Looking at her face in the funeral, I finally understood the importance of protecting environment.（节和感觉，否则很难不像流水账）

It is always early to improve the health care, but never the environment. My dad is the president of the city hospital, and he always tells me "If the government gives us enough money, this hospital can be the best one in this country very quick by hiring best doctors and buying newest equipment."（真人语言描写，用他人的口说你想说的话） But we all know that the environment is always harder to save. After second industrial revolution in Britain, the pollution in Thames River became horrible. When the British government realized that problem, it took them tens of years to solve it. Just like my mom always told me, " It's easy to make something dirty, really hard to make it clean again."

It's kind of like the paradox, but many times, the environmental problems cause many health care

issues.（一般考试都是二选一，有时候你会发现你选的那个其实可以导致或**没选的那个，也就是说这点要是点出来的话，就更证明你的论点的正确性了） Many datas do prove that, the people who live in a good environment have better quailities of lives. In 1970s, LBJ, the president of United States, passed a proposal which was called Clean Water Plan. It was made to make the water clean in the US, and it did work. The most amazing thing is that the datas show the numbers of patients in hospital decreased rapidly during first 15 years.（瞎编，有一定的事实根据） That does prove my point, the environmental issue is a important factor of the health care issues.

As I said, we do realize the seriousness and importance of the environmental issues. We do need a "Heaven" with clean water and air, green trees and beautiful mountains. The "Hell" with doctors and hospitals is always our last choice.

就这样，希望大家都成为作文帝……= =

答网友问：

1.我平时没有太多的积累或者说积累不够，快考试了，我该怎么办？

这种问题很普遍，毕竟积累不是一天两天甚至不是一年两年的事，所以我有这些建议。

现在来说积累来不及了的话，最后的冲刺阶段的话，就有目标的突击下例子吧，一般来说例子分两种

一是名人的事情，这类的话主要是要积累，当然我讲实话了如果实在没有的话，【编】也要比用一些不好或者说没特点的例子好，最后几天如果实在没时间的话我就建议，你背三个名人一个古代一个近代一个现代，比如汉尼拔、尼采、比尔盖茨，然后其他的事例你可以背了尽量往他们身上套嘛……（这是最后不得已用的招，毕竟你没有例子没办法，只能现编现套了， 当然了编的质量还是要靠你平时积累的例子和你看过的书籍啊电影啊之类的，此乃下策，不到万不得已千万不要用，伤RP~）

二就是身边人的例子，这类例子就可以随便编了，还是我文章中写的那样，越生动越详细越好，这种例子没有很大的感染力，靠的是【亲和力】，写出了人的共鸣就最好了

2.开头除了用quote，还可以怎么用？比如说科普类文章呢？

开头嘛，大部分我都是用quote起头的，如果是科技和专业知识类的文章，也是可以用quote的（下策就是编，你懂的= =），当然也可以用一点那种比较大的话比如说“Someone asked me

about *****, after****, I finally get the answer. I believe that ***”这种比较大的话比较好开头吧，具体我也不太清楚因为我也没写过此类文章。 = =

最近申请都结束了，可以帮大家义务解答一切申请、作文、考试的问题，我的者短信我，加qq前请注明，谢谢

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第二篇：托福真题：托福作文范文185篇【专业】满分作文(4)

托福真题:托福作文范文185篇【专业】满分作文(4)

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备考新托福(IBT)的同学们或许都听过独立写作185题库, 独立写作185题库是ETS公布的托福考试经典官方作文题库，收录在托福考试官方指南（Official Guide）的附录中，在托福考试改革之前，是作文真题的主要来源。现在的托福考试对官方作文题目进行了扩大，但是185题库仍然和托福作文真题紧密相连，为考生提供最权威最真实的托福范文参考和写作练习。智课网为大家带来托福作文范文185篇并附托福满分作文答题要点，考生们要认真备考。

托福185题库真题：

It has been said, “Not everything that is learned is contained in books.” Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books. In your opinion, which source is more important? Why?

托福满分作文-托福185范文赏析：

“Experience is the best teacher” is an old cliché, but I agree with it. The most important, and sometimes the hardest, lessons we learn in life come from our participation in situations. You can’t learn everything from a book.

Of course, learning from books in a formal educational setting is also valuable. It’s in schools that we learn the information we need to function in our society. We learn how to speak and write and understand mathematical equations. This is all information that we need in order to live in our communities and earn a living.

Nevertheless, I think that the most important lessons can’t be taught; they have to be experienced. No one can teach us how to get along with others or how to have self-respect. As we grow from children into teenagers, no one can teach us how to deal with peer pressure. As we leave adolescence behind and enter adult life,

no one can teach us how to fall in love and get married.

This shouldn’t stop us from looking for guidelines along the way. Teachers and parents are valuable sources of advice when we’re young. As we enter into new stages in our lives, the advice we receive from them is very helpful because they have already gone through similar experiences. But experiencing our own triumphs and disasters is really the only way to learn how to deal with life.

托福作文满分要素剖析:

一、语言表达

文章很少使用长难句，都是使用的比较简单的句子，但是句式多变。而且，文章也没有使用过多的大词，难词，比起一些比较卖弄辞藻、故弄玄虚的文章来说，多了一分平实，也更加易懂。但是句式多变又让文章极具可读性。

1. “Experience is the best teacher” is an old cliché, but I agree with it.

此句中，作者通过引述一句谚语来论证自己的观点。这种论据不仅有很强的说服力，同时这种地道的表达也拉近了与考官老师的距离，为文章增色不少。大家在托福作文的备考中要注意英文谚语的积累，一旦引用成功，文章就会上一个档次。

2. It’s in schools that we learn the information we need to function in our society. 此句是一个强调句，强调的是状语in school。强调句结构为“it is + 被强调部分+that + 句子后半部分”。被强调部分可以句中使除谓语以外的各种结构。判断强调句是否正确的一个标准是去掉句中的It is 和that，如果剩下部分还可以构成一个完整的句子，则强调句语法正确。

3. As we grow from children into teenagers, no one can teach us how to deal with

peer pressure. As we leave adolescence behind and enter adult life, no one can teach us how to fall in love and get married.

此句中As引导时间状语从句，表示“随着...”。这两句话最大的两点就是使用了并列的修辞手法，都使用了As...., no one can这样的句型，两句句式对仗，读上去朗朗上口，不仅使得论证语气更加强烈，同时使文章语言富于美感。

二、逻辑结构

本文采用了补正的欲扬先抑式的写法，这样的写法在考场上并不多见，比较有新意，第一段先承认了去书本学习的好处，后面一段再说还是从经验中学习更好，论述逻辑鲜明。文章活用了很多例子，多使用具体的例子，使得文章论据充分，论述饱满。文章还是用了对比的手法，凸显了从经验中学习的好处。

智课网温馨提醒：托福写作范文和模板仅供大家学习和借鉴，不要生硬的背诵，要学习写作思路，融会贯通到你的作文中，祝各位托福考生能够取得满意的托福满分作文。