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Population aging, which has made it difficult for many companies to recruit eligible young employees, pushes people to rethink whether compulsory retirement has been out-of-date. In my opinion, we should abolish this regulation and create more flexible legal articles instead, to protect the benefits of both workers and employers.

One of the reasons is that mandatory retirement results in a huge waste of human resources. People differ in innate talents, physical conditions and career types, so a unified requirement for their retiring age will probably prevent them from continually contributing to the society. For example, an elder prestigious professor will be required to stop working when he reaches the age for retirement, no matter how well his body function is and how enthusiastic of him to commit to his job. It is counterproductive for him to realize potential to the utmost and achieve a sense of accomplishment, thereby causing a waste of his knowledge and intelligence.

This regulation is likely to lead to skills gap in many corporations and end with the shortfall of capital. This is particularly the case for companies in high-technology area, in which the manager needs to spend

lots of money and effort on recruiting and training new workers after the old stuff retire, especially when young talents are more and more difficult to find under the aging trend. Consequently, the lower quality of work outputs at the meantime will exert a detrimental effect on their financial power and competitiveness.

Some people may argue that if the mandatory retirement is abolished, the benefits that employees are endowed with will be easily disregarded. It is possible for them to suffer from labor exploitation of greedy superiors, and be required to take large amount of workloads to maximize companies’ interests. As a result, they are deprived the chance of enjoying the happiness of family reunion and are at greater risks of sickness. In my mind, however, this concern can be addressed through specific legislation, like setting rules specialized in labor-incentive works, but intellectual works should be in the same case.

As suggested above, considering the potential damages which are brought by compulsory retirement, it should be abolished.

评语:

1. 总结段有些单薄,最好能总结上文出现的观点。

2. 第二段中提出公司会花钱培养新员工,这是一个普遍的现象,因为现在的员工都有一个入职培训,所以可以将这一段的观点改为

用老员工,可以减少公司培养新人的花费同时也可以缓解新人难找的压力。

3. 句意表达比较流畅,词汇使用丰富,多样。

雅思65分作文示例

得分:6.5

 

第二篇:雅思A类满分小作文经典示例

雅思A类满分小作文经典示例

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雅思A类满分小作文经典示例

雅思A类满分小作文经典示例

Writing 1 Task 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write your answer in a word processing program on your computer.

The table below shows the results of a survey to find out what members of a city sports club think about the club's activities, facilities and opening hours.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make any comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

Club satisfaction survey table

Range of activities--------Very satisfied---------Satisfied---------Not satisfied Ferrale members---------------35%----------------------35%-------------------30% Male memebers----------------55%----------------------40%---------------------5% Club facilities

Ferrale members---------------64%----------------------22%-------------------14% Male members------------------63%----------------------27%-------------------10% Opening hours

Female members---------------72%----------------------25%--------------------3% Male members------------------44%----------------------19%-------------------37% 范文:

The table compares the opinions of male and female club members about the services provided by a city sports club.

We can see from the responses that the male members are generally happy or satisfied with the range of activities at the club, with only 5% dissatisfied. In contrast,

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雅思A类满分小作文经典示例

however, only about two-thirds of female members were positive about the activity range and almost a third were dissatisfied. The genders were more in agreement about the club facilities. Only 14% of women and 10% of men were unhappy with these, and the majority (64 and 63% respectively) were very positive. Finally, the female respondents were much happier with the club opening hours than their male counterparts. Almost three-quarters of them were very satisfied with these and only 3% were unhappy, whereas nearly 40% of the men expressed their dissatisfaction. Overall, the table indicates that female members are most unhappy with the range of activities, while male members feel that opening hours are the least satisfactory aspect of the club.

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