20xx年上海高考英语作文范文及评析

又一年高考落下了帷幕。20xx年上海高考英语作文题较有新意——假设作者上周在一所小学观摩两堂绘画课，以日记的形式描写两幅小朋友的绘画作品，并谈谈从中获得的启发。其中一幅是小孩用脚蘸了颜料在画布上踩脚印，另一幅图是小孩用画笔在纸上画山水。

这不是一篇容易写的文章。同样是图片作文，今年的难度要高于20xx年的《课堂一角》。首先，提供的图片有两张，提高了对于描写的要求。高考英语作文已经不再仅仅考察学生的议论能力，它有些借鉴中文作文，要求学生夹叙夹议。在叙述中，如果只是平铺直叙那显然得不到高分。描写的关键在于捕捉事物的特征，而高考作文往往要求学生在短短几句话中描写到位，这其实是不低的要求。在笔者看来，精妙地运用几个动词是这部分制胜之道。相反，要少用形容词和副词。马克吐温曾说：“当你看到一个形容词时，杀死它。”虽然这样说不无夸张，但好的动词确实能让文章充满力量，生机勃勃。如，以下是笔者为20xx年高考作文原创的范文，请看这里的描写：

In this picture, the pupils are all beaming. They are scrambling to answer a question as if they have full confidence in themselves. The excitement and the eagerness to participate gush out of the picture.

This is reminiscent of my own classes at primary school. At that time, we each wore the same innocent smile, fought with a jungle of other hands, and single-mindedly believed our answer would impress the teachers most. I enjoyed these classes for they sparked my interest in many subjects and taught me that competition could be fun. 其次，图片的含义并不是显而易见的，需要看出每张图背后的意思并将两张图结合起来说。20xx年的考题也是开放性的，但相对来说学生比较容易展开。可以具体分析为什么小学生会积极举手发言，而年龄越大课堂参与感越弱。如以下这样论述：

Such fond memories they are! Unfortunately, as we grow older, we are increasingly reticent in class. There are many possible reasons for this change. It may be puberty that is to blame because we dread losing face. It may be that our body and mind are straitjacketed by the education system. It may simply be humans’ desire to conform to their peers—“Since nobody is putting their hand up, why should I?”

Whatever the reason, our carefree and innocent years at primary school is a reminder that we are always children at heart. Behind that cool facade, we can still be enthusiastic and committed to what we love doing.

而今年的考题可以表达的含义则更为多元。有些学生认为这两幅画体现了传统和创新优缺点，笔者并不完全同意。单单从创作的角度来说，用脚画画谈不上创新，脚印的堆砌也构不成艺术。而用画笔画山水也不尽然都是传统。因此，用这两幅画分别代表传统和创新不具有很大的说服力。既然话题是开放性的，绘画可以只是个表象，在绘画背后的寓意则更深刻。一个个脚印可以代表脚踏实地，不拒绝做一些朴实而基础的事。相反，山水画代表着鸿鹄之志，代表着对未来的憧憬。而这两种特质应该是一对矛盾统一。就像Facebook的创始人马克?扎克伯格说的一样：“把眼睛盯着繁星，把双脚踩在地上。”显然，这样的立意更耐人寻味。

再次，文章要求考生用日记的方式写，对熟悉了议论文、图表作文和书信等较正式文体的广大考生来说，是个不小的挑战。即如何体现出日记的风格，保持一种真实、清新、内省的笔调，而不是一副架势十足的虚伪样子。但是，作为应试作文需要有一定的规范。考生可能会疑惑是否可以使用俚语、习语、缩写或网络流行词。确实，笔者认为既要考虑日记的特性又要兼顾考试的规范是一件令人纠结的事。尽管如此，还是可以通过一些手段，如将较正式的it is缩略为it’s（面对自己，我们无需如此正式）或运用如would be better off这样较口语

化的表达。

在本次高考结束，笔者又特地创作一篇范文，供读者参考。笔者水平有限，如有错误，请不吝指正。

范文：

Date: June 8, 2012

Last week, I sat in on two painting classes at a primary school. In one class a student dipped her feet in ink and made a painting out of footprints. By contrast, the same student used a brush to make a breath-taking landscape painting—so vivid that one could almost smell the refreshing rivers and hear the chirping birds.

Though standing in stark contrast, the two paintings both intrigued me. In fact, they reminded me of what Facebook founder Mark Zuckerberg said, “Keep your eyes on the stars and your feet on the ground.” It’s this maxim on success that lends insight into the two paintings. The first painting represents that we should remain grounded and be cautious of being carried away with temporary success. A kite stays afloat because it’s attached to a reel; otherwise it will instantly lose its balance before eventually crashing into the ground. So it is with us.

However, success requires more than being simply down-to-earth, with a lofty ideal being another crucial factor. So grand was the scenery portrayed in the second painting that it embodied the reach of our dreams. Instead of ignoring the gleam of light, the spark of wisdom that flashes across our mind and worshipping the luster of the sky of geniuses, we’d be better off trusting that the gleam and the spark will one day shine as brightly as a search light if we have faith in ourselves.

The paintings taught me to dream big and act small. And I believe, by doing so, the warm light of success will cascade into my life.

 

第二篇：20xx年成人高考英语作文范文

20xx年成人高考英语作文范文

第一篇：

金钱是一切吗？In Money Everything？

I don?t think money is everything， but we can?t do without it. For example， money can?t buy us happiness and a good education. And for another example， money can?t buy us good health and a long life.

However, we can not live without money. We need it for our daily necessities , such as food， clothes and transportation. What?s more， we need it to live a better life. In short， we should learn the value of money and make the most of its advantages.

第二篇：

1、一些人喜欢住在城市，因为城市生活有许多便利。

2、但有些人喜欢住在农村。

3、我认为，……

Where to live —in the City or in the Country

Some people like living in the city because city life has many advantages. They think there are more job opportunities in cities， life there is more colorful and meaningful than that in the country， and there are more modern conveniences in cities for people to enjoy.

But some other people prefer to live in the countryside. They say life in the countryside is closer to nature and better for their health， life there is quieter and that country people are more honest than city people.

I would like to live in a city when I am young to earn enough money and I live in the countryside when I am old for having a quite life.

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第三篇：

你叫李平，是英语系学生会主席。写一封信给王教授，请他做一个有关中国历史的报告。注意信中要包括目的、时间、日期和地点。

Ⅴ。 Writing

May 19，2002

Dear Professor Wang：

On behalf of the Student Union of the English Department， I am writing to invite you to give a lecture on Chinese history.

We have planned to have such a lecture at 2：30 p. m. in Lecture Hall 419， on May 25.

Looking forward to your lecture. Inform us in advance if you can not come.

Sincerely yours，

Li Ping

第四篇：

男女应该平等吗？（Should Men and Women Be Equal？） Should Men and Women Be Equal？

People have different ideas about this issue， Some people say that men are superior to women in ability because men are physically stronger， do most of the hard labor in the world and hold most important positions. Other people believe that women have the ability to compete with men. There have been many famous women state leaders and great scientists in the world. We should fully carry out the principle “to each according to his work” so that the enthusiasm of both men and women for work can be fully aroused.

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第五篇：

1、在中国，自行车是最为流行的交通工具。

2、骑自行车有许多好处。

3、自行车的未来……

The Bicycle in China

The bicycle is the most popular means of transportation in China. China is a country “on

bicycle wheels“。 People ride them for various purposes such as going to and from school and work. Bicycles are very cheap and easy to buy in China.

There are many advantages to riding a bicycle. First， using a bicycle can greatly help reduce the air pollution in many big cities. Second， people can improve their health by riding a bicycle.

The future of bicycle will be bright. In some European countries， city governments have arranged pedestrians to use “public bicycles” to travel round the city center free of charge.

第六篇：

你是Helen，要写一封信给Julie，对她和她的丈夫昨日请你和你丈夫吃饭表示感谢，表示要回请他们，以答谢他们的盛情款待。

Dear Julie：

Thank you very much for the dinner that you invited my husband and I to yesterday. The food not only looked and smelled fabulous but tasted great， and my husband and I enjoyed it very much. Therefore， we would like to invite you to dinner at 7 p.m. this Friday at the Northwest Chinese restaurant to return your kindness and hospitality.

Please do come.

Yours，

Helen

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第七篇：

1、假冒伪劣商品是个严重问题。

2、一些原因导致了这种现象。

3、为了扫除假冒伪劣商品，……

Fake Commodities

Fake and poor quality commodities are a serious problem. Many things can be faked such as soybean sauce， vinegar， bicycles， and many other things. The interests of consumers are affected， and many enterprises keep losing money because of cheap fake commodities.

There are some reasons for such a phenomenon. The major one is the desire of some people to “make easy money”。 These people think nothing of the law of the protection of intellectual property rights.

To get rid of fake and poor quality commodities， the government should educate people to obey the law of the protection of individual intellectual property rights and not to sell any fake goods. The government should punish severely and close down all the factories producing fake goods.

第八篇：

你是Alice.你的朋友Bonnie很快就要到你的乡间小屋拜访，但你却要出去一会儿。留一张便条给她，告诉她食品在哪儿，告诉她一个人在屋里时应注意些什么。 May 18， 2002

Dear Bonnie：

I will be away for a while. The key to the cottage is under the doormat， and the food is in the refrigerator. After entering the house， lock the door from inside at once. The cottage is far away from the nearest town， and the area is not quite safe from burglars. So I think the saying is right “Where there is precaution， there is no danger”。 Have a nice stay here.

Yours， Alice

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总结：

表示举例：（exemplification）

for example， for instance， as an example，

as a case，in point， as an illustration， such as，

namely， that is， like， say.

表示比较：（comparison）

similarly， likewise， in the same way， equally important，

like， both， the same as，in common.

表示对照：（contrast）

on the contrary， on the other hand， otherwise， unlike， in contrast， whereas， rather than， conversely，

instead， by contrast.

表示让步：（concession）

although， nevertheless， however， but， yet，

admittedly， it is true …… but， in spite of， even though，

granted that.

表示原因：（cause）

because， because of， as， since， for， owing to， due to， on account of， on the ground of， as a result of.

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表示结果：（result）

thus， so， consequently， hence， therefore， accordingly， as a result， for this reason， as a consequence，

on that account， it follows that.

表示强调：（emphasis）

chiefly， especially， indeed， in fact， certainly，

particularly， to be sure， actually， above all， surely， most important of all， even worse， no doubt， needless to say.

表示列举：（enumeration）

first， second， in the first place， first of all， to begin with， in the second place， next， also， besides， furthermore， moreover， in addition， what is more， beyond that， for one thing， for another， finally.

表示总结：（summary）

in conclusion， in short， in brief， in summary， on the whole， finally， to sum up， to conclude. generally speaking， comparatively speaking， in general， in a sense， in a way， in my opinion， in some cases， nowadays， recently， currently， obviously， clearly， undoubtedly，

why young women don't want to have children.

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