20xx年江苏高考英语作文

第五部分:书面表达(满分25分)

81.下面这幅照片展现了女儿为回家妈妈拿包的情

景。请根据你对这幅照片的理解用英语写一篇短文。

你的短文应包含以下内容:

1.描述照片内容,如情景、人物、动作,等等;

2.结合自身实际,谈谈你的感想;

3.举例说明你能为家长减负做些什么。

注意:

1.可参照图中文字及下面文章开头所给提示,作

必要的发挥想象。

2.词数150左右。开头已经写好,不计入总词数。

3.作文中不得提及考生所在学校和本人姓名。

The burden of students has been a hot topic for

years, but the load of parents has received little

attention, especially from their own children.

此次的书面表达是一篇漫画类作文,是考纲中一直出现,但是首次露面的题型。这篇漫画类作文的话题很传统,体现的是学生所熟悉的“感恩”的内容,但是图中的提示,与其他省市以往的中文提示不同,这次使用了英文提示,但是英文提示不难。本解析将从谋篇,遣词,造句,逻辑四方面展开。

(一)谋篇——三步走

学生拿到漫画类作文,首先精读文字部分,确定写作主题是”感恩”,感情是“褒义”的,其次根据中文提示,按照“描述图片”“联系生活”“个人见解”三步走战略来谋篇。

1.“描述图片”应该包括何人,何事和何感受。

何人:a little girl and her working mom

何事:A little girl comes to greet her working mom happily. Realizing her mom must be very tired after a day’s work ,the little girl helps to remove the bag from her shoulder .Meanwhile,her mom kneels down .

何感受:The mom is thankful and delighted .Seeing this ,we are all touched .

所以第一段可以写成:The picture shows us a touching moment when a little girl comes to greet her working mom happily. Realizing her mom must be very tired after a day’s work ,the little girl helps to remove the bag from her shoulder .In response ,the mom kneels down to show how thankful and delighted she feels .

2.“联系生活”段落中,可以写两方面。一:反应了何种人,二是该人的做法是什么。以“感恩”为主题的作文,学生可以结合自身实际,说一下,自己有没有做到给父母减负。所以:

何人: my mom and I

该人的做法(一般是贬义):Totally engaged in my study ,I seldom pay attention to what mother needs and feels ,and always think studying well is the only thing I could

20xx年江苏高考英语作文

do in return.

3.“个人见解”则是根据“该人的做法”给出相应的解决方式。这边可以说一下自己将来准备怎么给父母“减负”

可以参考:I will spare no effort to help with the everyday washing ,bedroomcleaning.In addition ,I’ll try my best to prepare breakfast myself ,so as to share mother’s daily burden .

最后来一个升华句:“Being a good daughter outweighs being a good student.”

(二)遣词———三原则

高考写作中的遣词可以遵循三原则:复杂原则,多变原则和温暖原则。复杂原则是指可以用一些“牛词”来代替一些“土词“比如说,“忙于做某事”,一般的说法是:be busy doing sth,使用复杂原则后,我们可以用be engaged in doing sth.;be absorbed in sth;be buried in sth 等。多变原则就是当文章中要写两处相同中文意思的词时,善于用不同的词或者词组代换,比如最后一段,两处写到“努力”就可以使用不同的短语“spare no effect”和“try one’s best”。温暖原则就是,任何一个名词都可以用一个形容词,或者定语从句,或者是同位语从句来修饰,比如这边的working mum,就比“mum”形象得多;任何一个动词或者形容词都可以由一个副词来修饰,如:“a little girl comes to greet her working mom happily”中的happily 就对该剧中的come这个动词起到了温暖的作用。

(3)造句——三套路

书面表达中的句子也很讲技巧,可以遵循三套路:适当拉长,英式思维,闪光句式。首先适当拉长,可以运用定语从句,并列结构,插入语等方式使得句子变得更加的丰满。“In response ,the mom kneels down to show how thankful and delighted she feels .”这边的“in response”就是一个插入成分。其次是英式思维,要做到不是一直以人作为主语,宁否定不肯定以及宁被动不主动等。如 “Being a good daughter outweighs being a good student.” 就用了动名词做主语。最后是闪光句式,就是用一些比较出彩的句式,比如“Totally engaged in my study ,I seldom pay attention to what mother needs and feels”。这个句式中,运用到了非谓语动词,分词作状语的形式。

(四)逻辑——八联系

好的文章除了合理的篇章,出彩的字词,还离不开好的逻辑,这个时候,新东方课堂上总结的八大逻辑词就派上了用场。比如说表示让步我们可以用but, yet, however,转折 although,though, despite,in spite of;表示并列我们可以用both?and, as well as, neither?nor,递进:in addition, besides, moreover,因果:because of, due to, owing to, thanks to, on account of等词。

很多同学提到高考英语写作都会谈虎色变,因为有无数的高考猛士都惨败在它的手下,失分很严重。其实高考英语英语写作并没有想象中的那么难,只要我们细心品题,精准的使用词和短语,恰到好处的套用句型,合理的安排篇章,高分也不是特别的遥远。当然高考英语写作想有质的飞跃,还是需要大家在平时不断积累的。

one possible version:

The burden of students has been a hot topic for years, but the load of parents has received little attention, especially from their own children.The burden of students has been a hot topic for years, but the load of parents has received little attention, especially from their own children.

The picture shows us a touching moment when a little girl comes to greet her working mom. Realizing her mom must be very tired after a day's work, the girl helps to remove the bag from her shoulder. In response, the mom kneels down to show how happy and thankful she feels.

All this reminds me of my mother who has been doing whatever she could to let me have the best. But, totally enagaed in my own study, I seldom pay my attention to what mother needs and feels, and always think studying well is the only thing I could do in return. Now I know I can do my bit to help with the everyday washing, bedroom cleaning, or at least prepare breakfast myself, so as to share mother's daily burden. The picture convinces me it is even more important to be a good daughter than a "good" student.

 

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20xx年江苏高考英语作文word

81.下面这幅照片展现了女儿为回家妈妈拿包的情景。请根据你对这幅照

片的理解用英语写一篇短文。

你的短文应包含以下内容:

1. 描述照片内容,如情景、人物、动作,等等;2.结合自身实际,谈谈

你的感想;3.举例说明你能为家长减负做些什么。

注意:

1. 可参照图中文字及下面文章开头所给提示,作必要的发挥想象。 ........

2. 词数150左右。开头已经写好,不计入总词数。

3. 作文中不得提及考生所在学校和本人姓名。

The burden of students has been a hot topic for years,but the load of parents

has received little attention,especially from their own children.

The picture shows us a touching moment when a little girl comes to greet her working mom.Realizing her mom must be very tired after a day’s work,the girl helps to remove the bag from her shoulder.In response ,the mom kneels down to show how happy and thankful she feels. All this reminds me of my mother who has been doing whatever she could to let me have the best.But,totally engaged in my own study,I seldom pay attention to what mother needs and feels,and always think studying well is the only thing Icould do in return.Now Iknow I can do my bit to help with the everyday washing,bedroom cleaning,or at least prepare breakfast myself ,so as to share mother’s daily burden.The picture convinces me it is even more important to be a good daughter than a “good” student.

20xx年江苏高考英语作文word

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