留学论文宝老师在上篇的讲解中介绍到了闲言碎语留学文书Essay写作，其实，选择的素材和内容也不一样要轰轰烈烈和刻骨铭心，与小处见感悟，用一滴水去折射出太阳的光彩也是可以的。要想写出好Essay，且听留学论文宝老师继续讲解。

三、推陈

最理想的Essay是几篇小论文有主有次又紧密结合、相辅相成，同时能够和其他文书材料互相补充，作为一个整体在申请中发挥不同的作用，能够什么文书发挥什么作用，什么材料说什么话，显示出不同的Style来。

申请者在已经准备好的推荐信、主要Essay和建立的基础上，命题小Essay就要展示出以上材料没有的特点和想法。在写作时最好避开大家都会提到的方面，要根据自己的经历和性格特点去组织。一定要避开的内容如下：

1、我来自中国，来自五千年悠久历史的文明古国，从小接受仁义礼智信的传统教育。

评：这些话不仅是每个中国申请者都具备的特点，而且凡是了解中国国情的老师都知道。因此不要拿这些过于空泛的大帽子扣在自己头顶，反而属于凑字数，还证明了自己的从众心理。

2、我是一个品学兼优的好学生，成绩名列前茅。

评：虽然成绩是申请者的硬性条件，但是国外的大学不希望招进一个只会学习的人，而且这些成绩会在CV中展示。

3、我有很强的领导能力，同时我还有很强的组织能力。

评：仅仅这些是不够的，在一篇文章中提到自己的两点差不多就行了，可以试图用一些小细节事例体现出自己的相关能力，而不是用概括性的语言来鉴定。

四、出新

既然在上一个环节已经否定了一些，该部分自然要提出一些建议了。出新主要就是在原来的基础上创新，并不是全盘否定。因为申请人的背景都不一样，所以不可能给出一个英文模板，也没有既定的规律。正式写作部分申请人可以从以下几个方面着手思考：

l  家庭熏陶   家庭的熏陶对申请者的影响绝对是不能忽视的，父母为你做了哪些让你印象深刻的事情？给过哪些难以忘怀的关爱？从这些平凡的事例当中寻找一处情理之中意料之外的东西。

l  同伴感染   你与同龄人之间发生了什么特别的事情？对方发生了什么事或是你有什么困难求助于对方，以至于自己发生了较大的改变？

l  爱好特长   每个申请者都会有一个或多个爱好特长，写上去会向录取官证明自己自发地用这些活动来填补时间上的空白，你的生活不再单调，自己是一个有追求的人。

l  白璧微瑕   适当说出自己的一个缺点，并分析原因，找个适当的方法进行改正。这样会呈现出一个立体的、完整的、多面的申请人。

各位申请者可以从这些角度来挖掘自己的学习和生活经历，最好是有实例。在两篇文章中留学论文宝老师详细介绍了写作精彩Essay的八字秘诀。要申请的学生抓紧时间喽！如果您还有任何的问题欢迎随时咨询留学论文宝客服老师，24小时在线哦！

 

第二篇：l留学申请书

Personal Statement

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am with great pleasure to submit this personal statement in support of my application for continuing my university education in your esteemed university and wish you could give my application a positive and favorable assessment.

Currently, I am a junior student in International College of Hubei Normal University majoring in Accounting. Thus, I have obtained great knowledge about business for the past three years. Depending on that, I have determined to pursue a Bachelor degree at your distinguished university. There are there reasons leading to me choose business, the most important reason is that I am very interested in business. In my opinion, handling good business is the same as successful work of art. That’s an exciting thing. The second reason is that I have already learnt it for three years, so I want to broaden my knowledge about business which will benefit my future life. The third reason is that I want to become a successful business lady which is my dream all the time.

To be honesty, I am an average student but I have diligent and strong confident heart. I believe that a good attitude can change bad situation. So I am always keeping a positive attitude on my life. I never ever give up any chance of promoting my study. During my three years in Hubei Normal University，I never fail a class and always do my best for assignment. However，in my mind, social activity is as the same important as class study. In my spare time, I took part in student union and took charge of minister in arts department. Our well-organized activities attracted many students to practice themselves. Last summer, I joined the Work and Travel Programme to be a staff in an American company for three months. I made good use of that chance to improve my oral English and tasted western culture. I think I can understand and adapt to a foreign culture in a short period.

I firmly believe that anyone could acquire success by their right way and fighting. This is one of the reasons why I want to go abroad. What’s more, I want to taste and accept some western education. I hope that I can learn more differences between

Chinese and British university education and widen my horizon. Furthermore，as we know, UK is a very modern country. It owns the most advanced education system and top universities in the world. And graceful school environments deeply attract me. By the way, if I can learn in your university I would cherish and appreciate this chance. In the future, I also mean to apply Master’s Degree in UK. But after that, I will go back to my country and look for a job related to business.

I really want to own a colorful campus life in your school, further develop my overall capabilities including organizational ability, teamwork spirit etc. I believe I can adapt to a foreign life and acquire best degree. With all the above mentioned, in terms of my understanding of business and my enthusiasm for it, I hope that I can be up to the standard of the admission requirements in your university. I believe that my strong interest in this subject. last, my positive attitude and comprehensive ability will facilitate my successful completion of the proposed program.

Thank you for your time!

Sincerely yours,

Wanbin Xu