20xx届高考语文复习《作文》专题系列课件15《作文分论之话题作文结构创新》

15《作文分论之话题作文结构创新》 * 20##届高考语文复习 《作文》专题系列课件 一、常见的结构模式     1、总分式结构       总分式结构是指文章的开头部分总起,中间部分分述,结尾部分小结。一般分为“总分式”“分总式”“总分总式”三种。如“感受美好”为话题  中考满分作文        《美好人生》       岁月无声地在我身边穿梭,一切美好的事物在脑海中定格。快乐时总将它们取出,任美丽绽放。       我喜欢在公园里品味飘逸的花香,欣赏苍郁的树木,总能让人心旷神怡。我继续前行,被一个女孩叫住了:“姐姐,前面有一只漂亮的蝴蝶,请不要打搅它!”女孩的笑颜,在蝴蝶的五彩难斑斓中,让我感动。这一刻,我懂得了感悟,感悟身边的美――     夏夜的繁星,高挂在一望无际的天空中。它们在向人诉说着一个美丽的古希腊神话。宁静的夜里,有着星星的陪伴,任何烦恼、孤独便销声匿迹。     星空,真美!     秋日的斜晖……     落叶,真美!     冬天的<a name=baidusnap0></a>黄昏</B>……     夕阳,真美!     ……     人生美丽,从生命的开端到结束,孕育着无尽的美。――心灵,在美丽中晃动;希望,在美丽中萌发;生命,在美丽中充实。让我们倾注所有的激情、所有的心智,去感悟人生、感受美好。     感悟人生,不为别的,只为活在美丽中。     感受美好,不为别的,只为不白活一回。         2、对比式结构           对比式结构是指把对立的事物,通过一定的方式组合在一起,进行对照比较。        《想和做》、契诃夫的《变色龙》等就是这样的结构。真与假的对比,可以去伪存真;善与恶的对比,可以抑恶扬善;是与非的对比,可以拨乱反正。对比式结构会使形象更鲜明,性质更突出,道理更明显,情感更感人,从而增强表达效果,强化主旨。          3、横式结构            横式结构是指文章以平行的结构,从几个不同的方面(或角度),反复说明同一个事物阐述同一主旨、论证同一论点的结构方式。各层次之间呈现并列平行的关系,层次和层次之间,一般没有特别明显的主次、轻重的区别。当然各个层次之间仍然有内在的逻辑联系。  如:                             人生的选择        选择诚实和信誉。不仅是对得起他人,更是对得起自己。假如你选择了欺骗,总有一天会吞下自己栽的苦果……       选择赞美和歌颂。当一位比你出色的学友获得嘉奖时,你能真心诚意地走过去说一声发自内心的赞美和祝福吗?……       选择隐忍和坚持。人生的许多时候,不成功是因为我们面对困难的放弃和退缩,坚持下去,你会发现你比自己想象的要强!……                                                    (高考满分作文) 文章从不同的角度阐述心灵的选择,用排比形式展开全文,诚横式结构,富有说服力。           4、纵式结构             纵式结构是指文章各个层次之间,步步深入,或由浅入深,由表及里,或环环相扣,步步进逼,并且各个层次都有自己的位置,既不能越位也不能位,后一层必须是建立在前一层的基础上。像竹笋剥壳、蚕茧抽丝一样,使主旨的诠释逐渐趋向深入,并产生强烈的感染力,从而最终深入读者的心。  如《发问的精神》就是用这种结构。          运用纵式结构行文,需要对事物的全过程进行剖析,用发展的眼光对全过程的各个阶段的情况在本质上加以考察。          5、流浪式结构           流浪式结构是指以作品主人公的行踪为叙事线索,主人公去了哪儿,叙述者便随之去了那儿,告诉读者主人公和主人公周围的人在某时某地都发生了什么故事。这种写法,西方人称之为“流浪汉体小说”。       《鲁滨逊漂流记》、钱钟书的《围城》就是这种结构。不过,这种结构要避免对其他人物“招之即来,挥之即去”的毛病,尽量使故事之间、人物之间联系紧密。再如:中考满分作文《一本童话书的命运》 例如                          一本童话书的命运       我是一本美丽的童话书,经过作家们辛勤的创作、印刷厂叔叔们的编排,我终于被摆放到了书店最显眼的地方。我身上还散发着芬芳的油墨香味呢!不信,你闻闻。       由于童话家族的特殊风格,我们的出现顿时让书店热闹起来。我封面的烫金大字放射着迷人光彩,内页里饱含着一幅幅精美的卡通图案,连纸张都比我的同伴昂贵呢!       一大早,书店里来了许多顾客。一个小胖子,指着我对他妈妈说:“我要!”于是我高兴地飞到了小孩手中,我想,我的命运就要开始改变了。没想到,小胖子一回家,边吃东西边拿着我乱翻,片刻之间把我弄得满身巧克力,脏兮兮的的。想到自己以后的路,我不由担心起来。         第二天,小胖子将我带到学校。同学们一拥而上,争着来欣赏我,我不禁心花怒放,因为我可以交到更多朋友了。可惜好景不长,没过多久,我被他们抢来抢去,弄得浑身是伤。不到半天时间,大家对我的热情顿时降了下来,最后,我不知道被谁重重摔到地上,弄得浑身是泥。小胖子也不讲究,拿起纸使劲往我身上擦,结果将我身上的字都擦掉了。一天下来,我被弄得支离破碎,丑陋不堪。放学时,我竟被小主人扔进了垃圾堆。我伤心极了,孤独极了。        望着一个个离去的身影,我的泪水流了出来。这时,我被一个扫地的小女孩发现了,她轻轻捡起我,用手抚摩我。我感觉她的手好温暖。小女孩帮我擦干净身体后,用漂亮的纸包好,放到了她那漂亮的书架上。望着她那甜美的笑容,我忽然有了一种幸福的感觉。          我希望所有小孩都能像那个小女孩一样,爱护我们,让我们童话家族不再遭受我这样坎坷的命运。   1、重章叠唱式结构        各个段落开头语句大致相同,各段长短大体一致,在整齐中有变化,与反复中抒心志,往往能取得一唱三叹,回肠荡气的表达效果。 二、创新结构的方法 例:以“昨天”为话题,(2002深圳模拟考题),有位考生在题为“流逝的日子”的作文中就反复咏叹“记住昨天”,逐层深入作文主题。                             流逝的日子        自从一个人呱呱坠地的第二秒开始,他就拥有了“昨天”。自从一个人有了思想,他便会无尽地想起昨天,每个人都在沉思昨日时有了思想的成熟。走过了昨天,回忆着明天,思考着昨天……       记住昨天!我们这群十五、六岁的少年们,过了丰富多采的童年,童年是多么快乐无忧的日子啊。记得那次与伙伴们在幼儿园里玩耍;记得那次亲近可爱的小白兔;记得那次父母在儿童节带我去旅游……无数的“那一次”交织成一幅幅的画面让我难以忘怀。       记住昨天!我们会一次次的回忆起当年的自己犯下的蠢事;弄坏了同学的钢笔却悄悄地带着歉意逃走了;考试极差而冒签了家长的名字;一场恶作剧让朋友大哭一场……带着懊悔,那一件件往事清晰浮现在我的面前,怀着尴尬,我在现实生活中沉思那些不愉快的过去。         ……       记住昨天!拥有青春的我们要记住昨天。昨天的欢乐与痛苦,昨天的幸运与倒霉,昨天的成功与失败。昨天的每一件事都值得我们认真看待。       在念着流逝过的日子里,我们有了另一个起点,就这样思索着走过昨天,走向成熟……         2、蒙太奇结构      (1)、拼合式结构         拼合式结构,是指作品由几个片断拼合而成。将生活中富有意的典型的片断、场景、细节,灵活巧妙地剪辑连缀成有机整体,以充分表现文章的主题。 如:中考满分作文                             点滴真情令我感动       在现实生活中,使我感动的事实在是太多了,但我不为一件漂亮的衣服所感动,不为能住上豪华的房子所感动,不为金钱所感动,不为名利所感动……能感动我的只有世间那点点滴滴的真情。       一缕白发使我感动。       某日,妈妈头疼,她让我按摩按摩。当我按摩时突然发现妈妈头上已有一缕白发,顿时,我心里像打翻了五味瓶,一股热流冲向眼眶,泪水一滴一滴掉在妈妈背上。妈妈啊,你刚过不惑之年,怎么就有白发?是不是因为我不听话让你费心?是不是因为我考得不太好让你寒心?是不是因为家庭经济拮据让你劳心?是不是……妈妈,为了我的成长、为了这个家庭、为了你的事业,你付出的太多了,你的白发就是最好见证。不懂事的女儿啊,为什么你今天才发现了妈妈的白发?从那时起,我才真正读懂了什么叫“感动”。        几句关心的话语叫我感动。        “小枫,中央气象台说明天要下雨,别忘了带雨具,别忘了加衣服”,“小枫,中午吃干粮时,我办公室有开水,你们千万不要喝冷水”,“小枫……”这是我们上初中时,老师常嘱咐我们的话。这话实在太平常不过了,但从这些朴实无华的话语中透出老师对我们无微不至的关爱。    特别是当我处在友情与恋情的矛盾中时,老师的一句话让    我刻骨铭心。这句话是我从我的作文评语后看到的,当时我流下了感动的泪水。那句话是这样写的:青春的序幕刚刚拉开,未来的路还很长很长,即使你有情他有意还是要挽住青春的缰绳来制约感情的奔马,不要让它践踏两人心中那片友情的芳草地。       意想不到的行为使我感动。       父亲是个不善言辞的人,对我从来没有说过关爱方面的话,而往往是通过一些意想不到的行动来使我感动。有一次……        ……       没有大奖的喜悦,没有当明星的荣耀,平平凡凡点点滴滴的生活小事使我读懂了人生这本书,真正体会到了人间的真情。正是这一次次的感动,使我走向了成熟,领悟到了人生的真谛。         这种结构要避免“拼揍”:既没有中心事件,几件事或几部分之间也没有统一的线索。 (2)、时空交错式结构        时空交错式结构,是指在作品中,可以把现在

 

第二篇:20xx届高考二轮复习写作辅导魔鬼训练系列之主题概括(英语)

20xx届高考二轮复习写作辅导魔鬼训练系列之主题概括 要想概括段落的中心思想,反映作者的写作意图,我们必须借助一个概括性的句子,即主题句,它是段落的核心所在。所以,写好一个段落的前提便是写好主题句。

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Passage 1.

请根据段落其它信息推断总结出适当的主题句。

Clothes do not make the man.

人不在衣装。

1). From the chief executive to the office cleaner, everyone must accept this as the first priority over everything else in the company. In other words, everyone in the company must be sales oriented. The telephone operator the accounts clerk the storekeeper and everyone else must know how to handle enquires and customers politely, correctly. If the appropriate person is not around, the other staff should take orders if necessary, and even encourage order. The deliveryman must be willing to serve and please customers, and when called upon, he must be able to push and to show new products, accessories, etc. to get more sales for his company. Whether you are seeing hoses, hotel rooms, building contracts or exhibition services, you must ensure that you and your organization get enough sales, customers, clients, contracts or business to ensure a good regular inflow of income for your company. Everybody in the organization must understand that sales are the oxygen in the air that the organizational body breathes. Without sales the body dies quickly; with insufficient sales it dies slowly.

2). In other words, get the customer to reserve, to place orders in advance, and to sign a contract, to pay a deposit, or better still, to pay you in full before you acquire and deliver the product. Many hotels accept reservations for their rooms even before construction of the hotels is completed. Remember, you don’t have to buy before you sell. The biggest deals are made “no order”. Sold before you have them.

3)when you are really in an out of stock position, your sales people have to learn instead to feel apologetic for being unable to convince the customer to wait. Mercedes and even Honda cars, or a long time, were sold on a waiting list. Even restaurants make sales on order. Similarly, furniture, shirts and big manufacturing orders are some of the many examples where things are sold before they are made. Customers will wait for anything if they want it badly enough.

To be both a speaker of words and a doer of deeds.

既当演说家,又做实干家。

答案与解析:

1.答案〖〗The whole organization— all the members of the staff must acknowledge and understand this: selling is the most important activity of the organization.解析〖〗该段主要介绍从事商业的人员都应了解销售的重要性。在行文之中作者反复重申从事销售的人员,不论是主管还是店员,都应以销售为最主要的工作内容。判断主题句具体内容的主要方法就是通过本段分述部分的理解和归纳得出结论。我们可以从第一段主题句后看到“In other words”,这表明紧接着这句后面的内容既是我们应找的答案。因此可知本文第一段的主题句内容为:在整个销售领域中所有工作人员都必须了解销售的至关重要性。

2.答案〖〗Sell before you buy, whenever possible.解析〖〗同第一段很相似,这一段在主题句之后紧接着就出现了一个解释性词组“In other words”“也就是说”。这对于我们归纳中心非常有帮助。本段所有细节都是在强调从业人员要想尽办法首先实现销售这一理念,作者还一再

强调在进货之前就将销售订单签好是最成功的做法。基于此,我们将这段的中心内容确立为:只要有可能,你应提前卖出未进的货物。

3.答案〖〗Train your sales people never to use the excuse, never to feel justified in saying “no stock can’t sell”.解析〖〗本段列举了诸多经营有道的商家在无货的情况下照常进行销售活动的事例。这里依然在强调无论遇到什么困难,如没有货物可售,商家还是要坚持实现销售为先的原则,不能将没货或无法销售作为拒绝顾客的托词,这也是本段的中心意思。 Passage 2.

请根据段落其它信息推断总结出适当的主题句。

Factors That Influence Teen Violence1). Teens face many situations that cause these problems. Several factors are mass media, society’s view on the “perfect” person. 2). One might see a violent movie and decide to reenact the scenes thus causing harm to one’s self or to others. Hidden meanings of racism and hate are put into music. Teens hear the words of their supposed role models and think it is OK to follow in their foot steps. When reading of such violent acts as the Oklahoma City bombing or the murders of Nicole Brown Simpson and Ron Goldman, it is taken to most that anyone can get away with crime. 3). To be considered “in”, you must fit the role of the “perfect person”. As young adults, teens are trying to find themselves. They look toward celebrities and leaders for a goal. They try to buy the right clothes, wear the nicest shoes, and be present at all the social events. To fit in, some are pushed to the edge. If you are caught in a dark alley at the wrong time, you might be killed just for your name brand shoes. Competition among fellow teens leads to jealousy and jealousy leads to violent acts.4). Learning not to believe everything they see and hear will help to come to reality with this ever changing world. Self esteem and confidence in one’s self are very attractive qualities to possess. Violence will lessen as teens become more alert and smarter.

Variety is the spice of life.

变化是生活的调味品。

答案与解析:

1.答案〖〗In today’s society, the teenage population has experienced an increase in violence. 解析〖〗从题目中我们可看出这是一篇通过列举、说明来阐述问题的文章。文章将主要围绕对青少年有暴力影响的种种因素展开,那么第一段往往会以开门见山的方式开始,明确提出要讨论的问题,即以上我们确立的主题句。

2.答案〖〗Television, radio, and newspapers are all ways of transferring messages to people.解析〖〗本段具体介绍了邪恶的暴力是从哪些方面侵入青少年的生活的,即通过各种媒介。青少年时期的孩子很易受外界的影响,喜欢模仿,当然很容易受到媒体的种种影响,特别在暴力犯罪方面他们易受到误导。本段就是对这一现象进行阐述,首先将各种媒介的作用进行介绍,从而引出其它细节,这也是很关键的一点。

3.答案〖〗Society can often be a harsh world to live in for a teen.解析〖〗该段介绍了另一个在暴力方面对于青少年有影响的重要因素——社会。为什么我们生活的社会会成为影响青少年健康成长的原因呢?社会对于“优秀”青年的要求很高,很多人是愿意被社会认可的,但在成长过程中若被无限膨胀的攀比之风左右,那么有些孩子便会走向犯罪的边缘。因此对于青少年,我们可以说社会是苛刻的。

4答案〖〗Teenagers who follow their own morals and good judgment will find that they will be in less troublesome situations.解析〖〗除最后一段外,文章一直在描述青少年受多种影响而有暴力倾向的原因。那么孩子们只能这样艰苦地挣扎着,不断地回避着各种诱惑与威胁吗?如果真是这样那就太可怕了。在文章的结尾,作者阐述了青少年自信心的培养在避免暴力问题上

的重要性,这也是作者最后给我们的希望。

Little goods, little care.

钱财少,不烦恼。

Passage 3.

请根据段落其它信息推断总结出适当的主题句。

Is the Death Penalty Cruel and Unusual Punishment?

1). According to the Merriam Webster collegiate dictionary, cruel is defined as: disposed to inflict pain or suffering devoid of humane feelings. Unusual is defined as: not usual, uncommon, or rare. Punishment is defined as: suffering pain or loss that serves as retribution. Should capital punishment be viewed as retribution used to cause pain or suffering without humane feelings, and is it uncommon? 2). Punishment by death is the ultimate punishment and one that cannot be taken back. A jury is instructed to determine guilt beyond a reasonable doubt, but with a punishment as final as death, any doubt should be reason enough for a person to live. Forcing a jury to decide whether a person should live or die is wrong. If the jury decides the person should die, then they have just committed the same crime they just sentenced someone to die for, murder. The jury then has to live with the fact that they killed someone. Just this stress put on the jury is enough to call the death penalty inhumane, not to mention the years the inmate will have to sit on death row knowing that at any time, it could be their turn to be strapped in to die. As far as the death penalty being unusual, since the U. S. is the only western democracy to still use the death penalty, it would be safe to say this punishment is uncommon. 3). Some look at it as an eye for an eye, but as Mahatma Gandhi once said, an eye for an eye only makes the whole world blind. As we head into the next millennium, it is time we modernize our punishments of criminals just as we have modernized every other aspect of our lives.

答案与解析:

1.答案〖〗In order to determine whether the death penalty is to be considered cruel and unusual punishment, it is necessary to first define each word in order to get full understanding of the issue being assessed.解析〖〗首段除主题句外,主要是将标题中的关键词逐一进行了解释,解释的出处为韦伯斯特词典,这也显现了文章内容的准确性。将关键词进行解释的目的在于看清问题、分辨是非,以便更好地为文章服务。这篇文章的题目是一个选择疑问句,要得出正确的答案,首先就应统一我们对问题中的字句的理解。通过我们对第一段的上述分析可得出本段主题句的主要内容为“为确定死刑是残忍的还是不同寻常的刑罚,将涉及的关键词解释清楚有助于问题顺利地讨论”。

2.答案〖〗The message that is sent out by killing a murderer is if you kill, we kill. 解析〖〗Man struggles upwards; water flows downwards.

人往高处走,水往低处流。第二段篇幅相对较长,能够给我们提供的可参考的内容也就多了起来。作者在本段中详细记述了犯人在被陪审团判处死刑的过程,同时也谴责了陪审团这样做的另一种意义。该段对问题的深入探讨,揭示了死刑这种惩罚的不可溯性,作者认为判杀人犯死刑的也在杀人,所以他最后说死刑是一种不同寻常的刑罚,即在第二段结尾处作者已将本文的问题做了答复。我们把这一段的中心提炼出来就是:如果我们判处杀人犯死刑,实质上我们自己也在杀戮。

3.答案〖〗The death penalty should not be carried out in any case.解析〖〗从这最后一段的陈述中我们可以深切地体会到作者不赞成执行死刑,他认为死刑不应再被继续执行下去,人类在其它方面不断进步时也应将死刑等类似的刑罚加以改进。若将这段内容浓缩概括为一句话就是我们需要的主题句:不论何种情况,死刑不应再被执行下去了。

【友情提示】

想写出合格的主题句吗?铭记以下四个要点你就会做得更好:

完整主题句结构要完整,即结构符合语法规则;意义要完整,即主题句是一个符合逻辑的完整命题。

清晰主题句表意要清晰明确,不使用意思含混的词或句子。

具体主题句的内容要明确具体,否则不利于段落的拓展。

贴切主题句一定要用词贴切,简明达意,使段落的拓展有一个良好的基础

Passage 4.

请根据段落其它信息推断总结出适当的主题句。

Route to Success

No sweet without sweat.

幸福来自汗水。1). You must always be diplomatic so that you do not put people in a defensive position. When people are forced into a defensive position, they close their minds and will not listen to you. Whenever possible, it is better to deal with problems calmly and logically, and without hostility.

2). People should be more civilized. Scolding, accusing, and threatening will only make the person as mad as you are at him, and nothing will be solved. In fact, it will probably create even more problems! Say things in a way that doesn’t hurt people’s feelings. Remain calm and logical on the outside. But inside you must have strength and intensity.

3). Let the other person know that you want to help solve his problem as well as you own, so that everyone will be satisfied and no one will be angry or hurt. Try this way and you will be a successful one.

答案与解析:

1.答案〖〗In order to be successful in your dealings with people , you must use that right approach.解析〖〗从题目可知这是一篇关于我们都很熟悉的话题的小文。但要提醒大家注意的是,当我们在做类似的题目或者遇到类似的考题,审题时一定不要陷入思维模式的惯性中。也就是说不能完全以我们个人的相对狭隘的思路来左右文章,而应跟随文章作者的思路往下走;根据作文的具体要求审题、拟稿。现在让我们来分析一下第一段,该段从正、反两方面阐述与人交际时正确方法的重要性。再根据标题和段落中的具体内容我们可以判断该主题句内容应为“与人交往时取得成功的方法”。

2.答案〖〗It is rarely helpful to get angry and emotional.解析〖〗在谈论正确的待人接物方法问题之后自然会涉及到与人交往时应避免的一些情况及不应持有的态度,这也是第二段的主要内容。那么它的主题句就可以被确定为“愤怒和情绪化对良好人际关系的确立没有帮助”。

3.Better the last smile than the first laughter.

宁可最后微笑,不要首先狂喜。答案〖〗In dealing with a problem, be nice and understanding.解析〖〗热情、积极地对待别人、帮助别人解决问题你就会很成功。在最后一段中作者将与人交际中正确的做法,即到底应该怎样做才会得到人们相应的良好回应做了阐述,那么这一部分的中心内容可以归纳为:解决问题时要做到亲切且善解人意。

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