2011英语专四作文范文（附阅卷老师讲评）

2011英专四级作文题目

Recently Government agencies in some big cities have been studying the possibility of “posing a pollution tax” on private cars. The amount of tax private car owners would have to pay would depend on the emission levels, i.e. engine or vehicle size. This has caused quite a stir among the public. Some regard it as an effective way to control the number of cars and reduce pollution in the city. But others don’t think so. What is your opinion?

Write a composition of about 200 words on the following topic:

Should private car owners be taxed for pollution?

范文一：9分作文

Should Private Car Owners be Taxed for Pollution?

Recently the government agencies in some big cities have been studying the possibility of putting a “pollution tax” on private cars. This has caused a great stir among the public. Some people hold the opinion that it is an effective way to control the number of cars and reduce the amount of pollution in the city, but others don’t think so. As far as I’m concerned, private car owners should be properly taxed for pollution.

The following two reasons are used to support my point of view. On one hand, as well known to us, our surrounding is seriously polluted especially by car pollution. Therefore, “pollution tax” on private car can effectively remind us of the severely pollution. Then the number of cars and pollution in the city can be reduced in some way. On the other hand, we know that we are facing the resource crisis. However, more private cars will use up more gas or other resources. So if we tax private car owners for pollution, we can decrease the use of resources and then protect the environment from pollution indirectly.

In conclusion, I think that private car owners should be properly taxed for pollution. It is not only for punishment but also for warning. “pollution tax” on private cars is an effective way to control the number of cars, reduce pollution and protect resources. From now on, as students, we should try our best to carry out it, such as going somewhere far away by bus, or other public transportations.

阅卷专家评论：

1. 审题基本准确；

2. 内容基本切题；

3.结构不够严谨；

4.论据缺乏说服力，论述不够充分；

5. 语言一般，不够流畅。

范文二：11.5分作文

Should Private Car Owners be Taxed for Pollution?

As the development of our society, more and more people buy private cars. And recently government agencies in some cities have been studying the possibility of putting a “pollution tax” on private cars, which has aroused quite a stir among the public. In my opinion, the private car owners should not be taxed for pollution, and I have three reasons for my opinion.

Firstly, I think the emission levels can’t decide how much pollution the car had made and how much money the owner should be taxed. For example, a car with a smaller engine maybe produce less pollution, but if the owner use it more frequently, of course it will produce more pollution. So the tax shouldn’t depend on the emission levels.

Secondly, the tax for pollution maybe more harmful to our environment. As you know, if a person pay some money for the pollution, he will think there is no responsibility for his car and there is no need for him to protect the environment, because he has already pay the money for the environment. Then he may pay little attention to the environment, and even harm the environment. So “pollution tax” maybe not be good for the environment.

Thirdly, protect the environment is the duty of every of us, not just several private car owners. If the government just force some private car owners to pay the “pollution tax”, the rest of us will think there is no duty for us to protect the environment. Then there will be more people to destroy the environment, and less people to protect the environment. Of course, the result of the “pollution tax” will be oppose to the original purpose of the government.

All in all, “pollution tax” is not good to our environment. And we should also remember that the duty of protect the environment is not just the duty of several private car owners, but the duty of everyone of us.

专家评论：

1. 审题准确到位；

2. 内容切题充实；

3. 观点清晰独到；

4. 结构严谨合理；

5. 有一些语言错误。

范文三：14分高分作文欣赏

Private Car Owners Should be Taxed for Pollution

It isn’t until recent years that the government elected out a scrappy win on cutting carbon dioxide emission, in which controlling the number of cars and advocating small-size vehicle have played an important role. Imposing “pollution tax” on private cars, without any doubt, will exert certain effect on controlling pollution, but only through a more refined and considerable scheme, can the policy thrive to its maximum power to realize the goals.

The first and foremost thing to consider is the volume of vehicle that belongs to government itself. As the government calls for taking public transportation rather than small vehicle, the “pollution tax” imposed on stated owned vehicles which is almost for personal use should be more severe than that on private vehicles. As long as the government creates the image of reducing pollution by constraining its volume of vehicle to nesserary level, will the public begin to lay emphasis on the reduction of vehicles and also environmental protection.

There is a further consideration that the tax should not only be judged by the engine or

vehicles’ sizes, simply because not everyone drives the same distance. In other words, the “pollution tax” will be enhanced through the collaboration with other forms of tax, like “oil tax”. The introduction of tax portfolio can make tax payment reasonable when the individual interest is safeguarded.

It is certain that “pollution tax” can contribute to the environment protection. However, the tax will not fully function unless a more considerate scheme of policies taken into account. 英语专业四级考试在线课堂

专家评论：

1. 观点新颖明确；

2. 内容切实到位；

3. 篇章结构清晰；

4.衔接自然合理；

5.语言流畅，词汇丰富，句式多变；

6.有一些语言错误。

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论点明确、清楚

论证层次分明

结构严谨

紧扣论点讨论分析，论证有说服力

观点阐述合乎逻辑

衔接自然、顺畅

语言运用得体

 

第二篇：20xx一模作文范例

20xx年一模各区中考写作范例汇总：

浦东：

1.Write a passage of at least 60 words on the topic “study brings me______”（以“学习带给我______” 为题，写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格。）

（注意：短文中不得出现考生的姓名，校名及其他相关的信息，否则不予评分。） Use the following points as a reference .(一下内容仅供参考)

What does study bring you?

Why do you think so?

How do you study?(give a example/examples.)

静安：

2. Write an article of at least 60 words about the topic "OQ or MSN or Fetion - a good way to communicate |with friends!'' (请以“QQ或MSN或 Fetion——一种与朋友交流的好方式！”为题写话。字数不少于60个。要求内容连贯，表达清楚。标点符号不占格。)

(注意：中文不得出现考生的姓名、校名及其他相关信息，否则不予评分)

Suggestions: (Choose one of the above ways to write your article.") (请选择一种方式进行写话) ﹡What do you know about “QQ” or “MSN” or “Feton”?

﹡Have you ever used it (QQ or MSN or Fetion) to communicate with your friends?

﹡Who are the people you often communicate with? What are your topics?

﹡How do you like it? What are your reasons?

黄浦：

3.Write at least 60 words about the topic "New Year's Day 2011". (以“2011元旦”为题，写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格，不记入60个词。)

（注意：短文中不得出现考生的姓名、校名及其它相关信息，否则不予评分。）

Use the following questions as a guide. (下列问题供参考)

? How was your New Year's Day?

? What did you do on that day?/How did you spend your New Year's Day?

? Did you enjoy your New Year's Day?

4. 崇明

Write a passage of at least 60 words on the topic “Something I Will Never Forget”. ( 以“令我难忘的一件事”为题写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格。)

（ 注意：短文中不得出现考生的姓名、校名及其他相关信息，否则不予评分。）

Use the following points as a reference. (以下提示仅供参考)

? What was the experience that you will never forget?

? Where and when did it take place? (Describe the experience)

What effect does this experience have on you still?

5.松江：

Write at least 60 words about the topic "The best way to make me happy". ( 以“最能使我快乐的方法”为题，写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格)

The following points are for your reference: (所给提示仅供参考)

1. What are the ways to make you happy?

2. Which way do you think is the best one to make you happy? (give at least two reasons)

3. Why do you feel happy in this way?

6.闸北

Write a passage of at least 60 words on the topic 'I like reading___________

(comic strips/detective stories) better'. (以我更喜欢阅读_____________(连环画/侦探小说）为题，写一篇不少于60个词的短文，阐述你对连环画和侦探小说故事的看法。写作前先完成标题，标点符号不占格）

Suggested questions ( 以下问题仅供参考) Which do you prefer to read, comic strips or detective stories?

Why do you like to read them better? (Give at least two reasons.)

What do you think of the other kind? (Give at least one reason.)

7.长宁

106. Write a passage of at least 60 words on the topic "Getting on well with friends". (以“与

朋友出好关系”为题写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格。)

（注意：短文中不得出现考生的姓名、校名及其他相关信息，否则不予评分。）

短文需包含下列要点：

1. Do you have good friends?

2. Do you sometimes have problems with them?

3. How do you deal with the problems?

8.虹口：

Write a passage of at least 60 words on the topic “I?d like to say ?Goodbye? to _______” “我想对_______ 说再见”为题写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格。)

（ 注意：短文中不得出现考生的姓名、校名及其他相关信息，否则不予评分。） Sentence patterns for reference （以下句型仅供参考）

1. Who or what would you like to say ?Goodbye? to?

2. Why would you like to do so?

3. How do you feel when you do this?

9.金山：

Write a passage of at least 60 words on the topic " I want to be an environment protector”

Use the following points as a guide:

What are the problems of our environment?

Why do you want to be an environment protector?

What will you do to protect the environment?

10.闵行：

Write at least 60 words about the topic “Is it good for more people to own cars?”（以“更多人拥有小汽车是好事吗？”为题写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格。）

（注意：短文中不得出现考生的姓名，校名及其它相关信息，否则不予评分。）

Use the following points for reference.（以下问题供参考）

●Do you think it is good for more people to own cars?

●Give your reasons.

(If necessary, please give your suggestions.)

11.青浦：

Write at least 60 words about the topic " The best TV programme I have ever watched". Use the following points as a reference.

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? Which TV prpgramme is your favourite? What is it about? Why do you like it? (Give one or two reasons.)

12.杨浦

Write a passage of at least 60 words on the topic “Changes the World Expo Has Brought Us”.

( 以“世博会给我们带来的变化”为题写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格。) （ 注意：短文中不得出现考生的姓名、校名及其他相关信息，否则不予评分。）

Sentence patterns for reference （以下句型仅供参考） ．．．．．．．．

? Has the World Expo brought us any changes?

? What are the changes that took place around you? Name at least two changes.

? What should we do after the World Expo?

13.宝山

Write a passage of at least 60 words on the topic "Water Shortage"（以“水资源短缺”为题，写不少于60个词的短文）

Use the following points as a guide :

1. Water is very important in our life.

2.

3. What is the cause of the water shortage? What is the way to solve the problem? 14. 奉贤

Write a composition at least 60 words " A thing happened in my class"（写一篇不少于60个词的短文，题目为“发生在我班的一件事”，标点符号不占格。文中不得出现本人和学校姓名。）

a) What kind of the thing happened in your class?

b) What do you think of the thing?

15.嘉定

Write at least 60 words about the topic "I'm ready for...". (以“我已准备好…”为题写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格。)

What are you ready for?

1. What have you done to get ready for it?

3. Do you think you can eventually do it perfectly?

16.卢湾：

Write at least 60 words to your friends on the topic "How to Use Computers Correctly?".

（以“怎样正确使用电脑”为题写一封不少于60个词的信给中学生，标点符号不占格。） （注意：文中不得出现考生的姓名、校名及其他相关信息，否则不予评分。信的开头和结尾已给，所给部分不计入字数。）

You can use the following points as a guide. (以下句型仅供参考)

1.Tell your feelings.

2.Introduce computers' advantages and the students' problems.

3.Give your advice. Dear friends.

How time flies! __________________________________________________________

17.普陀

Write a passage of 60-80 words on the topic “I can learn about ______ from our school activities”.（以“学校集体活动让我懂得了。。。”为题写一篇60-80词的短文，标点符号不占格。）（共18分）

Suggested questions”

? What school activity (ies) do you like best?

? What can you learn from it/them?

18.徐汇 Write at least 60 words about Li Hua's visit to Julia's family according to the picture

given. (根据所给图画写一篇关于

"李华去拜访朱丽叶的家"的短文.短文不少于60个词,标点符号不占格.)

Use the following phrases as a reference. (以下短语仅供参考)

? pay a visit to

? introduce sb. to sb.

? a Chinese painting

? show sb. around

(浦东)

Why do we come to school? Different people may have different answers. Some people say that they come to school to study just because they dream of a better job, a better future. But in my viewpoint, study brings me happiness. It is said that everyone who is interested in studying may find pleasure in reading. Exactly! Study can not

only enrich my knowledge and broaden my mind, but also bring me lots of fun as well. What's more, study always teaches me how to be honest, confident and

knowledgeable. In a word, I like studying very much.（97）

(虹口)

What did I use to be? I was not a clever boy and I never thought I should study hard. I hated school and disliked the teachers who were too strict with me. Maybe playing computer games and running after fashions were the only interesting things to me. But now I've changed a lot. Looking at the boys and girls who are studying hard all day, I feel lonely. Study hard, and try my best ! Chase my dream and never give up! This is

who I am. Say goodbye to what I used to be! （98）

Changes the world expo has brought us(杨浦)

As we all know, the 2010 world expo was held in our city last year. It was a great success. Millions of visitors from home and abroad came to Shanghai to visit it. Changes have taken place after the great event. First, we can see "Haibao" here and there. The smiling mascot stands for the friendliness and confidence of people in Shanghai. Second, streets are wider and our transportation is more convenient than before. There are flowers and trees on either side of the roads. Besides, more and more foreign companies are being built in Shanghai. Shanghai will be more

prosperous in the future! "Better city, better life". As a Shanghainese, I feel very proud.（115）

Li hua's visit to Julia's family(徐汇)

Li hua is in London on his study trip. Last Sunday he paid a visit to Julia's family. This was her first visit to a British family, so she arrived early in the morning. Julia welcomed her warmly. She introduced her parents to Li hua. Li hua gave them a traditional Chinese painting as a present. They liked it very much. Julia showed Li hua around her house. At noon, Jilia's mother cooked much western food. Li hua enjoyed it very much. What a good time Li hua had!(89)

I can learn about cooperation from our school activities(普陀)

All work and no play make Jack a dull boy. So our school always holds various

activities. They are good for our studies. Among them, I like playing basketball best. I can learn about cooperation from basketball. We know basketball needs team spirit, and a player on a basketball team should cooperate with the others. How will we live and work with others in the future? Maybe cooperation with others is the best choice.(74)

The best TV programme I've ever watched(青浦)

The best TV programme I've ever watched is “Tom and Jerry”. “Tom and Jerry”is a cartoon TV series and it is very famous in the world. The story is about a house

cat(Tom) and a little cute mouse(Jerry) . Tom always chases Jerry and fights with him. But Tom hardly succeeds in catching Jerry mainly because of Jerry's cleverness, abilities, and luck. This cartoon TV series brings me a lot of fun. It also teaches me what friendship is. I love it very much. (90)

The best TV programme I've ever watched(青浦)

The best TV programme I've ever watched is “Human and Nature”. The

programme is broadcasted on CCTV1 every week. It is about animals、plants and the relationship between human and nature. From this TV programme , I've got to know that nature is full of mysteries. I also realize that humans are responsible for the bad environment. If we don't care about nature, we will pay much more. The TV

programme brings me much knowledge. I love it very much. (84)

Getting on well with friends(长宁)

Everyone needs friends. One can't imagine a life without friends. I always make friends with others, so I have many good friends. We share our joy as well as our sadness together. Of course ,sometimes friends don't get on well. We may have problems. If so, we need to cool down. After all, trust and tolerance are the best ways to solve these problems. In a short time, we will make up and become friends again. (76)

The best way to make me happy(松江)

Sometimes things go wrong and I may feel rather upset/blue/depressed. When I'm not in a good mood, I like reading a funny story or playing games with my friends. But the best way to make me happy is to listen to music. For one thing, music can make me relaxed and give me much pleasure. For another thing.,listening to English songs can improve my English skills. In one word, I feel happy while listening. (74)

How to use computers correctly(卢湾)

Dear friends,

How time flies! I'm very glad here to tell you something about computers.

Computers have both advantages and disadvantages. We can search the Internet for information, listen to music, chat with our friends, play computer games and so on . But some students have problems. They spend too much time on computers. This is not good for their eyes and does harm to their studies as well. Even worse, some

students may watch bad web sites. So it is necessary for us to use computer correctly. Here is some advice: firstly, homework first and surf the Internet regularly. Secondly, don't give your personal information to a stranger. Thirdly, do things that are good for your study.

I wish you a colorful school life! (123)

Yours,

Li Fei

New Year's Day 2011(黄浦)

My New Year's Day 2011 was a wonderful day. I had a three-day holiday. During the holiday, my grandma, who lives in the countryside ,came to see my family. She hasn't come to Shanghai for several years. So I showed her around Shanghai. We visited Nanjing walkway road, the Bund, the Jinmao Building and so on. We also bought lots of things in shopping malls. Grandma felt surprised that Shanghai had changed a lot. She almost lost her way. We were both very tired, but we were very happy as well. (90)

Water shortage(宝山)

As we all know, water is very important in our life. We can't imagine life without water. But now, lots of rivers and lakes are seriously polluted. Clean water is less and less. The problem of water shortage is becoming more and more serious.

We should take some actions to solve this problem. First, government should make laws to prevent factories from pouring waste water into rivers or lakes. Second, we should take a shower instead of taking a bath. Finally, we shouldn't leave the tap running when we are brushing our teeth.

If we don't save water, the last drop of water will be a tear-drop of us. (94)

I want to be an environment protector(金山)

Nowadays the problems of environment are becoming more and more serious. Factories pour dirty water (chemical waste) into rivers or lakes. Cars give off waste gas and the air is unhealthy for us to breathe. More and more trees are cut down. The earth is our only home and we have the duty to take care of it. So I want to be an environment protector. First, I will tell the people around me to protect environment. Second, I'd like to plant more trees with my friends. Finally, I will shop with a reusable bag instead of a plastic bag. I believe if every one of us does something to protect our environment, our world will be greener and more beautiful.(119)

Something I will never forget(崇明)

I will never forget the experience when I was in Junior Two. It was an English

lesson. My English teacher, Mr. Wang, gave us a topic "Be confident in yourself". We had only five minutes to prepare, and then someone would be asked to give a speech in front of the whole class. I was a shy girl and I was not good at English as well. But suddenly I found that Mr.Wang. was looking at me. His eyes seemed to tell me that I could be the first volunteer. I was shocked but full of courage. Of course, I was the first to go onto the platform and gave my classmates a speech, not perfect but wonderful.

Today I'm still thankful to Mr.Wang. This experience teaches me "Be confident in myself and nothing can beat me."(137)

A thing happened in my class(奉贤）

Last Friday afternoon, our class held a special class meeting——Contest of Singing English Songs. We sang a lot of English songs , such as "Far Away From Home", "Big Big World", "My Heart Will Go On", "Seasons in the Sun" and so on. The whole class were excited and full of laughter. Through this activity, I began to love English songs. Also This contest is instructive and it made me interested in learning English from then on. (78)