英语专四系列：作文之范文赏析--大学生收入来源

题目：Income Sources of College Students

写作要求

According to an investigation, half of the income of American students comes from their parents, ?fteen percent comes from scholarships and the rest from part-time jobs; while ninety percent of Chinese students’ income comes from their parents. What do you think of the result of this investigation?

Write on Answer Sheet Two a composition of about 200 words on the following topic:

Income Sources of College Students

You are to write in three parts.

In the ?rst part, state speci? cally what your idea is.

In the second part, provide reasons to support your opinion OR describe your idea.

In the last part, bring what you have written to a natural conclusion or a summary.

Marks will be awarded for content, organization, grammar and appropriateness. Failure to follow the instructions may result in a loss of marks.

审题思路

本题是一道个人观点表达型的题目，表述自己对中美大学生收入来源差异的看法，可以从以下几方面着手 ：

思路1：可以写导致这种现象出现的原因；

思路2 ：可以写这种差异将来会不会发生变化 ，变化的原因是什么 ；

思路3 ：也可以写这种差异反映了什么样的问题 ；

思路4 ：还可以写通过什么措施来消除这种差异。

范文赏析

Income Sources of College Students

According to the investigation, Chinese students rely much more on their parents for financial support than their American counterparts . As far as I’m concerned, there are many reasons behind the gap and it will change in the future.

引言部分：作者先概述了题目给出的内容，这点很重要，如果只是简单复述，会留下文字驾驭能力不足的印象。接着明确说明下文要写的内容：原因和未来的趋势 。

In my opinion, the main reason lies in the sense of independence. American students are taught to be independent when they are very young. For example, they will have to earn their own pocket money by helping with the house chores or doing part-time jobs since their childhood. On the contrary, Chinese students are taken such good are of that it is very difficult for them to live on eir own. In other words, American parents treat their children in college as responsible adults while Chinese parents will take it for granted that they should help their children in all ways as long as the children

need it. As a result, Chinese American peers do. What’s more, Chinese students have fewer opportunities to find part-time jobs.

主体部分：作者重点给出了一个独立性差异的原因，并进而引申说明父母观点的差异导致了孩子独立性的差异，这里除了运用对比以外还通过举例证明自己的观点。除此以外，作者另外说明中国学生找兼职的机会少，这也是造成这一差异的原因。

However, the gap will narrow gradually in the future. Nowadays more and more Chinese students are seeking part-time jobs as they’re eager to acquire some social skills and earn some money, which will help them to do more in school and to live independently. As to the American students, I think the sources of American students’ income will remain the same.

总结部分：这个结尾是属于预测性的，认为这种差异会慢慢缩小，并给出了原因。

亮点回放

1. rely: “依靠”，常用搭配为rely on sb. for sth. ，近义词为depend on sb. for sth.。

2. financial support: “财务支持” ；这里用的是一个比较正式的说法 ，非正式 的说法其实就是money 。

3. counterpart :“对手 、职位（地 位 ）相当的人 ”；这是个正式用词，其实就是指American students。

4. behind the gap: “在这差异背后”；实际上在这里这个词组是“解释这个差异”的意思。

5. lie in: “在于”；也可以用consist in来代替 。

6. pocket money: “零花钱”；此处也可以用allowance来代替 。

7. house chores: “家务活” ；也可以用family chores来代替 。

8. in other words: “换句话说” ，在这里其实起到了一个递进的作用 。

9. take it for granted: “想当然认为??” ；该词组 中的it是形式宾语 ，词组后面要接that从句 ，或者直接将宾语放在 中间 ，变成take ... for granted。

10. peer : “同辈” ；此处和上文 的counterpart为近义词 ，本文对 同一概念的词使用了不 同的表达方式 ，体现了作者 良好 的词汇驾驭能力 。

11. narrow: “变窄、缩短”常用作形容词 ，此处作动词用 ，常用搭配有 “narrow the gap”等。

12. acquire: “获得 、获取” ；通常搭配knowledge ，skill ，wealth ，information等 。

 

第二篇：英语专四系列：作文之范文赏析--出国留学的利与弊

英语专四系列：作文之范文赏析--出国留学的利与弊

题目：Studying Abroad: Hardships and Rewards

写作要求

Nowadays more and more students choose to go abroad after they graduate from colleges and universities. They say that they bene? t a lot from it, though some people argue that there are many hardships and dif? culties. What’s your opinion about it?

Write on Answer Sheet Two a composition of about 200 words on the following topic:

Studying Abroad: Hardships and Rewards

You are to write in three parts.

In the ? rst part, state speci? cally what your idea is.

In the second part, provide reasons to support your opinion OR describe your idea.

In the last part, bring what you have written to a natural conclusion or a summary.

Marks will be awarded for content, organization, grammar and appropriateness. Failure to

follow the instructions may result in a loss of marks.

审题思路

本题是一个观点选择型的题目，就目前大学生在毕业后选择 留学的利弊孰大孰小进行分析。题目可以从以下几个方面入手：

思路1：利大于弊

虽然有困难 ，但整体上利大于弊，利体现在 ：1. 教学软件硬件优异 ；2. 有利于将来就业等。

思路2 ：弊大于利

虽然有好处 ，但整体上弊大于利 ，弊体现在 ：1. 费用昂贵 ；

2. 文化差异 ，难以融入其中等。

思路3 ：应具体问题具体分析 ，因人而异

留学有益 ，体现参考思路1；

留学也有弊端 ，体现参考思路2 ；

是否选择留学 ，应根据个人情况而定 。

Studying Abroad: Hardships and Rewards

There is no denying the fact that studying abroad is a hotly debated2 topic today. As far as I’m， concerned, I believe hardships and rewards coexist and people have to consider it from all sides.

引言部分：作者先提出留学是个热门话题 ，然后说明留学有利有弊应全面综合来考虑 。这表明下文将既讲利又讲弊。

Obviously, studying abroad has a number of rewards . In the ?rst place, a student can have access to advanced science and technology as well as desirable working conditions which mightnot be available at home. In the second place, he can be exposed to entirely new

ideas and trends. Last but not least, by living and studying in a foreign country, one can improve his foreign language much faster than at home.

Nevertheless, as every coin has two sides, studying abroad also confronts one with a series of hardships. For one thing, learning a foreign language is far from an easy thing at the beginning for most people. For another, a completely new environment with different customs and habits may also be a barrier to overseas students, especially to the young. An added difficulty lies with ?nance: it can cost a lot to study abroad.

主体部分：作者先说有几个显而易见的益处是列举观点时常用的句式。然后用“In the first place, ... In the second place, ... Last but not least” 。nevertheless进行转折，说明留学会让人遇到很多困难。这时列举所用的句式换为“for one thing ... for another...”使文章更富有变化。

Therefore, studying abroad should be viewed as a two-edged sword, which presents us with10 both bene? ts and troubles. The best policy11, as I see it, is to take into consideration his financial conditions and his ability to adapt to new surrounding. Personally,

I’d choose to go abroad and study if I ?nd it necessary.

总结部分 ：作者概述上面所列利弊，用“a two-edged sword”来概括再恰 当不过，并提出选择出国留学的标准应该是“take into consideration his financial conditions and his ability to adapt to new surrounding”。

亮点回放

1. there is no denying that:“无可否认” ；还可以用undoubtedly ，without doubt等更为简洁的表达方式 。

2. hotly debated: “被激烈讨论的” ；相当于“heavily/frequently discussed” ，但比之要g更地道些 。

3. rewards: “奖赏、报酬 、报答” ；此处表示“回报”，近义词为“returns”。

4. have access to: “能获得”，access的形容词accessible也经常使用在be accessible to的词组中，注意与之区别 。

5.desirable:“令人满意的，称心如意的”，另外它的反义词

undesirable表示 “不尽如人意的”。

6. be exposed to: “暴露在??之下”，此处还可以用 “be faced with ，be confronted with”等。

7. confront sb. with sth.: “使某人遭遇到 （某事 ）” ，此处注意与be exposed to的区别 ，前者不以人为主语 ，用主动语态 ；后者以人为主语 ，用被动语态 。

8. far from: “远离” ，此处表示 “远非” ，相当于never ，但语气委婉些 。

9. barrier:“障碍” ，近义词还有 “obstacle ，block ，hardship ，setback”等 。

10. present sb. with sth.: “给某人带来某物” ，也可以用 “provide sb. with sth.” ，但present 显得更正式些 。

11. policy : “政策 、方针 、保险单” ，此处 “the best policy ”表示“最好的办法” ，用法地道 。