作 文 训 练

作文训练要求： 1 文章布局要合理，写作思路要清晰

一、回扣课文、交流材料 写 前 指 导 百草园到三味书屋》，讲述的是鲁迅少年时期在百草园和小伙伴们玩耍捕鸟的童年往事以及在三味书屋里枯燥乏味的读书生活，两个地方两种截然不同的生活；

第二篇是林海英的《爸爸的花儿落了》，课文讲述的是“我”

由衣服上的夹竹桃引起的对爸爸的回忆，回忆中有欢乐，也有感

的丑小鸭处处受排挤，手嘲笑，受打击，但它并没有绝望，也没有沉沦，而是始终不屈的奋斗，最终变成了一只美丽的高贵的天 了你》，告诫我们要正确面对挫折；第二篇是弗罗斯特的《未选

择的路》，告诫我们选定一条路就要坚持下去。 童”最终变成常人的故事，告诉我们一个人能否成才与后天的教 1

育和滋生的学习有关。 顺，事事如意，总会有有一些这样那样的烦恼，现在请您围绕“成长的烦恼”这一主题，敞开心扉，大胆倾诉自己的心里话，写出烦恼是什么，因什么而烦恼，如何正确对待这些烦恼。

二、指导学生编写作文提纲、组织材料

基础差，老师、家长要求高等方面）。

（二）、来自家庭方面的烦恼。

（三）、与同学交往上的烦恼。

（四）、有关自身形象、生理等方面的烦恼。

三、指导学生口述构思 是什么，尽量选择你亲生经历的典型的素材，这样才能写出真情

实感，进而才能打动读者，引起读者的共鸣。

四、评议指导

五、板书设计

成长中的烦恼

（1）学习方面的烦恼

（2）家庭方面的烦恼

（3）跟同学交往方面的烦恼

（4）自身形象生理方面的烦恼

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作 文 批 改

一、较好的作文

四、作文目标达成情况

做的不错。但在选材上却不够典型，新颖。

五、需要鼓励的学生

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难点是不能打动读者 ，引起读者共鸣 作文讲评

周凯文 《成长的烦恼》

到选材具体典型，叙述要详略得当；结构上要前后连贯；语言要

质朴且有真情实感；细节描写也很必要。 后在自己修改，这样咱们的作文水平才有所提高。

五、板书设计

成长的烦恼

（1）选材要典型

（2）叙述要详略得当

（3）语言要有真情实感

（4）必要的细节描写

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二 次 评 价 不论写什么作文，叙事一定要具体，通过具体的事例反映自己的“烦恼”， 说得清楚、连贯、完整。写作时除了故事情节，语言描写之外，还应加上神态、动作等描写，这样内容就更充实了。 禹文旭 石统宇 李彬 刘云鹏

取舍必须切合题目要求，而且材料要写得具体，力求做到典型；多个材料的文章，还要根据主题的需要，安排好详略；还有更重要的是文章必须有作者正确的情感倾向。此外，语言的润饰、各种表现手法的运用、结构的安排，都要服从于表达主题的需要出发。 5

 

第二篇：成长的烦恼英文作文

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Growing Pains

In Memory of the Past Days

Looking into the mirror, the man there is no longer that little boy singing and laughing all day long with his treasured toys. Instead, there stand a man who is legally an adult, though he is still immature and sentimental. People say youth is the most precious and the most brilliant in our long period of life, and I agree with it. We are strong in body, quick in mind, we are always full of passion, energetic and high spirited. Youth is the sun in the morning and the rainbow in the sky. We have grown up, suddenly. Looking back of the old days, it seems being a college student can be so cool and so pleasing, no more homework waste your time, no more criticism spoil your mood, no more ignore let you down. We can find our own way and go on it without interference, we can do whatever we want and achieve whatever we have dreamt.

But gone with it, are our indelible years, sweet and sour, worth remembering and unforgettable.

Still remember the days when dad, mom and I sit around the table, talking about all kinds of things, about happiness and sorrows, about dream and wishes. Every time I am happy and excited, there are mom and dad with whom I can share the joy. Every time I am upset and distressed, there are mom and dad who smile at me and

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fuel me the power to go forward. Every time I achieve my little success, it’s them who encourage me and tell me “carry on”. Every time I put my foot wrong, it’s them who pull me back and guide me the right way.

Still remember the days being crazy with best friend, chasing around on the playground, skipping class to a long waited movie, playing an innocent prank on someone…… the simple, pure and treasured friendship started to grow in that infancy heart.

Still remember giving the gift to that girl I love. Though don’t know what love is and means. It’s like magic which attract you and let you forget all the sorrows and sadness. Seeing her smile became the best time life can’t be replaced.

Days are gone. No more stupid, no more spoil, no more kidding, it’s our turn to strive and fight for our dream. Little bit perplexed, little bit nervous and little bit excited, not sure what life is in store of me, but not afraid, not regret, not sad. I will keep going and never give up.