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雅思教父刘洪波：旅游类雅思作文高分范文及点评

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1. 旅游

International travel is becoming cheaper, and countries are opening their doors to more and more tourists. Do the advantages of increased tourism outweigh its disadvantages?

Air travel combined with early retirement and people with money to spend has meant that more and more people can travel the world. Some countries, especially those with famous historical sights and beautiful natural scenery try to attract this large market. While there are some problems that can be caused with all this travel, generally it is a positive thing.

Firstly, consider that all these tourists mean money that governments are eager to tap into. For many countries, tourism is a big part of GDP and without it their economies would suffer. Foreign tourists bring important dollars to the service industry and lots of small shops and vendors.

Secondly, by encouraging tourism governments are promoting their cities and countries. In my country, China, for example, increased tourism and hosting the Olympics has changed people’s perception of our country. At the same time, tourism allows local people to gain exposure to people from other countries, which is also a good thing.

Of course it’s not always a perfect picture. Not all tourists have a good attitude and manners. And in some cases they may even have a negative influence on the local

population. But these situations are not so common, and embassies can create tough guidelines for getting a visa. This seems like a reasonable compromise.

To conclude, international travel is a great thing, but it is a privilege that should not be abused. Governments should encourage it, but also put in place measures to keep dangerous people away. This will result in a win-win situation for everyone.

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Harvey点评：

写作线索：首段，国际旅游利大于弊；第二段，刺激本国经济；第三段，加深双方了解；第四段；不利之处。末段总结。

本文我们看到加汉老师是以一位中国学生的口吻写出来。他曾告诉我他的中文名字有两个含义：加拿大的男子汉；加入汉族。

第四段的观点比较抽象，其实针对国际旅游的弊端，我们可以谈对旅游资源的过度开发；旅游景点的环保压力；对当地居民生活方式的影响；经济过渡依赖于旅游业的后果等等。

如果我写这篇文章，国际旅游的好处第一条我就说：“许多人类的文明古迹虽然是某个国家拥有的，其实也是全人类的财富。比如长城、金字塔。应该让全世界的人去参观、欣赏和尊重”。先上升到一个全人类的高度，凸显大气。大部分考生不是写不出来，主要是想不到。思想有多高，作为分数就有多高。

先学习下面的词汇和短语，然后再重读范文，体会它们在文中的运用

词汇

Retirement n.退休

Tourism n. 旅游业

Vendor n.卖主，小贩

promote vt.促进，推广

host vt. 主办

perception n.观念，理解

embassy n.大使馆

guideline n.指导方针

compromise n.妥协，折衷

privilege n.特权

abuse v.滥用

短语

famous historical sights 历史名胜

beautiful natural scenery 美丽的自然风光

be eager to渴望

tap into 利用

in some cases在有些情况下

have a negative influence on对…有负面影响 win-win situation 双赢局面

三分钟熟读或背诵本文最实用的三个句子

? Some countries, especially those with famous historical sights and beautiful

natural scenery try to attract this large market.

? Secondly, by encouraging tourism governments are promoting their cities and

countries.

? This will result in a win-win situation for everyone.

 

第二篇：Dyfuqc雅思教父刘洪波：儿童类雅思作文高分范文及点评

生活需要游戏，但不能游戏人生；生活需要歌舞，但不需醉生梦死；生活需要艺术，但不能投机取巧；生活需要勇气，但不能鲁莽蛮干；生活需要重复，但不能重蹈覆辙。

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儿童类雅思作文高分范文及点评

——摘自刘洪波20##新作《最简化雅思写作》

Some people believe that time spent on television, video and computer games can be beneficial to children. Others believe this has negative effects on a child. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In recent years parents have had to make tough decisions about how much time their kids should spend watching TV and playing computer or video games.  Some have argued that they are not only a waste of time, but potentially harmful.  Others, however, claim that kids should be kids and deserve some entertainment.  Personally, I feel that the best approach is moderation.

On the one hand, too much TV and gaming can have a negative influence.  Physically, hours in front of a monitor are harmful on the eyes.  And mentally if kids spend too much time living in a virtual world, they may lose the ability to make friends and socialize in a normal way.  Moreover, seeing too much violence and questionable content could influence young people’s behavior, as they are impressionable.

On the other hand, all children need to have fun and play.  If students only study, they will surely suffer from mental and emotional pressure and stress.  Also, not all content on TV or online is unhealthy; there are lots of educational shows and content that is positive.

Speaking from personal experience, I think the right approach is to have a healthy balance.  In this regard, parents have a responsibility to set boundaries and make sure that the content their kids are viewing is appropriate.  As well, TV and video games are not the only ways to have fun, so parents should encourage their kids to interact and play with other kids in person too.

In the end, we should follow our common sense.  Parents should be firm but fair with letting their kids play online or in front of a TV screen.  Most things in moderation are healthy, and TV and video games are no different.

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刘洪波点评：

写作线索：观点中立，适度即可。第二段on the one hand，讲负面；第三段on the other hand，讲正面；最后讲家长要重视和起作用。

经典的中立型文章。可学习的点很多：首先，首段最后一句中The best approach is moderation.（最好的办法是适度）moderation一词可以理解为中文的“（把握）火候”，是中立文章的点睛大词，不可不学。其次，第二段中分别用physically和mentally拓展了写作思路；最后，文章末句提升至哲学高度：Most things in moderation are healthy, TV and video games are no different.（大多数事情适度都是好的，电视和视频游戏也不例外）是啊，适度饮酒对身体好；打打小麻将，买买彩票还怡情呢。但最难把握的就是这个moderation“度”啊！

先学习下面的词汇和短语，然后再重读范文，体会它们在文中的运用

点睛词汇

deserve [di5zE:v] vt. 应受，值得

moderation [7mCdE5reiFEn] n. 适度

socialize [5sEuFElaiz] v. 社会交往

virtual [5vE:tjuEl, -tFuEl] adj. 虚拟的

questionable [5kwestFEnEb(E)l] adj. 有问题的

interact [7intEr5Akt] vi. 互相作用，互相影响

firm [fE:m] adj. 严格的

必备短语

make decision 作出决定

spend sometime (in) doing sth. /spend sometime on sth. 花时间在（做）某事上

have a negative influence有不良影响

be harmful to/on sth. 对……有伤害

make friends交朋友

suffer from遭受

in this regard在这点上

have a responsibility to do sth. 有责任去做某事

set boundaries限制

in person亲自

三分钟熟读或背诵本文最实用的三个句子

l   And mentally if kids spend too much time living in a virtual world, they may lose the ability to make friends and socialize in a normal way.

l   As well, TV and video games are not the only ways to have fun, so parents should encourage their kids to interact and play with other kids in person too.

l   Most things in moderation are healthy, and TV and video games are no different.