高考英语满分作文范文及点评

  Dear Bob,

 I’m so glad that you are coming to learn Chinese here. I’ve already found you a house near our school. I’d like to tell you something about it.

  You may get on No. ll bus at Fang Cao Street and the next stop is just Jian Xin Chinese School. The house is near the school. It is about 25 square metres. In the bedroom, there is a bed, a sofa standing against the wall and a table near the window. You may find a light on the table and a chair next to it. There are two other rooms connecting the bedroom. The left one is a bathroom and the right one is a kitchen. So you may cook by yourself. The rent for the house is 500 yuan per month.

  Hope you’ll enjoy staying here!

  Yours,
  Li Hua

  点评:
  本文内容具体,详略得当,表述方式很有创造力和新意,长短句并用,语言结构富于变化,错落有致,顺畅圆润,尤其是情态动词和分词的运用很独到,为文章增色不少。

  作文:

  Dear Bob,

  I’m glad to hear from you.

  Welcome to our city in september. I’ve found a suitable house for you.

  The house is on Fang Cao Street, not far from the Jianxin Chinese School. If you take the No.11 bus, it is just one stop.

  It is a flat on the third floor of a building. It has three rooms, a living-room, a bathroom and a kitchen. You can cook yourself. The mirror, the basin and the bathtub are very convenient for you. In the living-room, there is a bed, a sofa and a desk with chair. The desk is next to the window. It will be good for study. The total size is 25 square metres and the rent is 500 yuan a month.

  Will you be satisfied with this flat, or you want another one? Just let me know. I’ll try my best to help you.

  Yours,
  Li Hua

 

第二篇:山东20xx年高考英语满分作文范文

山东20xx年高考英语满分作文范文

【考题再现】

第二节:写作(满分30分)

假设你是新华中学的学生李华,你的美国朋友Tom一周前给你发电子邮件,询问你暑假里的打算,但你因准备期末考试未能及时回复。请根据以下要点给他回邮件:

1. 未及时回复的原因;

2. 你假期的打算(如做兼职、旅行、做志愿者等)。

注意: 1. 次数:120~150;

2. 可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。

【试题点评】

今年的书面表达题目延续山东省一贯的提纲作文命题习惯,时隔一年之后重新回到“书信题”的大框架中,考了一篇“以道歉信为外衣,以活动安排为主体段”的提纲作文,相当于10年山东卷(道歉信)和07年四川卷(假期安排)和合体。这种作文是我们平时经常练习的,因此套路很完善、套话很丰富。此外,本文中需要同学们翻译的难句不多,因此,只要在备考过程中有意识地了解过高考英语作文的提分方法,掌握了常用的亮点词汇、加分句型和过渡词,并加以针对性训练,这道题目应该不难写。

【经典套路】

第一段:问候+写信背景+写信目的

第二段:“道歉”部分(相当于“写信背景”)

第三段:“假期安排”部分

第四段:补充说明+客套话

【高分范文】

Dear Tom,

How are you doing? (问候) You asked me in your last letter about my plan for the coming summer vacation.(写信背景) I am sorry that I didn’t reply without delay.(写信目的)

How I wish I would read and reply your email as soon as I received it. However, I was busy preparing for my final exam at that time, which is vital for me. As a result, I had no choice but to

completely focus on my study. I believe that if you were me, you would make the same choice.(第二段为道歉信常见套路)

By the way, I have a busy schedule for my summer vacation.(主题句) First and foremost, I would do a part time job, so that my interpersonal skills would be improved.(拓展句1) Additionally, I will take a short trip to Beijing to take a summer course in the New Oriental School.(拓展句2) Last but not least, maybe I will work as a volunteer for the school as a teaching assistant.(拓展句3) These are my plan for the summer vacation. What’s yours? I am looking forward to your earliest reply.(以合理的客套话结尾)

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