生命中，不断地有人离开或进入。于是，看见的，看不见的；记住的，遗忘了。生命中，不断地有得到和失落。于是，看不见的，看见了；遗忘的，记住了。然而，看不见的，是不是就等于不存在？记住的，是不是永远不会消失？

        

雅思教父刘洪波：教育类雅思作文高分范文及点评

雅思教父刘洪波2010权威作品

《最简化雅思写作》

8月光芒上市

从零开始，单词、词组、句式、思想

完全应对官方四大评分标准

最新研发最简化15句写作框架模板

涵盖雅思题库各类型高分范文

幽默通俗的语言手把手教出写作高分

中国区前任雅思考官强力推荐

Most countries spend lots of money on education as they start to recognize its importance. In your opinion which two following subjects are the most important for your people and which one is the least important?

Subject:

Literature  Sports

Mathematics  Economy

Physics History

Music Geography

It has been said that investing in education is investing in one’s future: this is true for both individuals and nations.  It is always somewhat subjective to say which is more important, the humanities or sciences, as both have value.  However, I would like to make a case for the importance of math and economics in this day and age.

Let us begin with math.  Mathematics is a foundation subject which bridges many different fields, from physics and chemistry to the Internet and modern medicine.  All of our material advances in the 20^th century could not have happened without advanced mathematics.  To be sure, it will also play a critical role in meeting challenges like global warming and space travel, to name just a few, in the future.

Likewise, economics is a fundamental discipline that allows societies to be stable and move forward.  History is full of example of kingdoms and empires that collapsed as their economies declined.  Most obviously, we need look no further than the current economic meltdown to see the importance of economics.  The jobs and wellbeing of individuals and nations alike depend upon a deeper understanding of this field.

While all subjects have their merit, perhaps Geography doesn’t have the same importance it once did.  After all, in our modern world we have 3-D maps online that allow us to see anywhere with the click of a mouse.  But to reiterate, we need a balanced approach to education where we still produce artists and thinkers and historians and so on.

To summarize, math and economics are critical subjects in the 21^st century.  Governments must do their part to make sure we invest in these key areas and have qualified teachers.  By doing so, they will ensure our prosperity and progress.

(294 words)

Harvey点评：

写作观点：数学、经济学重要，地理不重要。所以文章中间三段分别讨论三个学科。

这篇文章题型少见，题目内容对中国考生来说比较另类。说明哪个学科的重要性不难，难的是说明一个学科为什么不重要，还注意到题目中有最高级词汇：the most important, the least important。

我们受到的教育是行业没有三六九等，行行出状元。如果在小学课堂上讨论此类题目，有小朋友胆敢说地理最不重要，老师一定会发飙：“胡说，不要有偏见，各个学科都重要，人类都需要，缺一不可。”于是大家考试不能偏科，长大之后都没有了“偏见”。

而这篇文章就是逼着你写出偏见，让你偏科，还很极端，因为题目中有最高级。

所以我最欣赏的是在本文首段第二句话，在表达个人偏见前的让步：It is always somewhat subjective（主观的） to say which is more important, the humanities（人文学科） or sciences, as both have value. 这句话我相信也是大多数考生看完题目后的第一感觉，但表达不出来。

先学习下面的词汇和短语，然后再重读范文，体会它们在文中的运用

词汇

subjective      adj.主观的

foundation    n.基础

bridge    vt.架桥，连接

critical     adj.关键的，重要的

meltdown     n.彻底垮台

wellbeing     adj. 福利，康乐，安宁

reiterate    vt.反复地说，重申

短语

invest in投资于

make a case for 提出充分的理由 

in this day and age 当今

play a critical role in 起到关键作用

meet challenge 应对挑战

to name just a few 等等 = and so on

depend upon依赖，依靠

allow sb. to do sth. 使某人能做某事

with the click of a mouse 只需鼠标一点

do one’s part to尽自己的职责

key areas 重要领域

三分钟熟读或背诵本文最实用的三个句子

l   It is always somewhat subjective to say which is more important, the humanities or sciences, as both have value.

l   Mathematics is a foundation subject which bridges many different fields, from physics and chemistry to the Internet and modern medicine.

l   All of our material advances in the 20^th century could not have happened without advanced mathematics.  

 

第二篇：雅思教父刘洪波：犯罪类雅思作文高分范文及点评

雅思教父刘洪波：犯罪类雅思作文高分范文及点评

雅思教父刘洪波2010权威作品

《最简化雅思写作》

8月光芒上市

从零开始，单词、词组、句式、思想

完全应对官方四大评分标准

最新研发最简化15句写作框架模板

涵盖雅思题库各类型高分范文

幽默通俗的语言手把手教出写作高分

中国区前任雅思考官强力推荐

Putting criminals into prisons is not an effective way to deal with them. Instead, education and job training should be offered. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

How to handle criminals is a problem that all countries and societies face. Traditionally, the approach has been to punish them by placing them in prisons to pay for what they have done. Some, however, advocate for trying to make them better with training and education and it seems they may have a good point.

First of all, consider all the money that we have to spend to lock people up in jail. It doesn’t seem like a good use of public money if the people don’t actually get any better. Because most criminals eventually are let out of prison, our focus should be on making them better citizens.

In fact, the reason why many people end up in jail in the first place is because they didn’t have a good education or happy family. So if they can learn job skills they perhaps can find work and feel they can contribute in a positive way. If they do this, they won’t need crime. Surly everyone deserves a second chance.

Of course this does not mean that we should be too lenient on criminals. Those who commit crime should still be punished, but during their punishment they should also be treated. If we make an investment in them and show compassion, most will be able to make a new start.

To summarize, we must make more of an effort to go to the root of the problem. We need to treat criminals as patients and give them the medicine they need: education and training. By giving people the skills for a second chance we can make our society safer and healthier.

(271 words)

Harvey点评：

写作线索：首段，赞同题目观点；第二段，罪犯在监狱里什么都不做是花着纳税人的钱的；第三段，没有接受教育和不幸的家庭是原因，要教育，要给他们机会；第四段；当然要惩罚，但惩罚和治疗并用。末段总结。

好文章。末段第二句的比喻给本文增色不少，：We need to treat criminals as patients and give them the medicine they need: education and training.十分贴切。

先学习下面的词汇和短语，然后再重读范文，体会它们在文中的运用

词汇

Punish vt.惩罚，处罚

Advocate vt.提倡

jail n.监狱=prison

lenient adj.宽大的，仁慈的

compassion n.同情

patient n.病人

短语

in jail监禁

end up最后结果

commit crime犯罪

make an investment in…投资于

make an effort to do 努力去做

三分钟熟读或背诵本文最实用的三个句子

? In fact, the reason why many people end up in jail in the first place is because

they didn’t have a good education or happy family.

? We need to treat criminals as patients and give them the medicine they need:

education and training.

? By giving people the skills for a second chance we can make our society safer

and healthier.

——摘自刘洪波2010新作《最简化雅思写作》